Drove by some apartments, thought of some friends.
Hey, Michael- thanks for sharing your work with us. Very cool idea. Some good visuals. Nice (sad) surprise at the end of the chorus. Some good work. Keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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Nice song and message the only thing mabey
Try removing some of the she’s. The song sounds good as written just something that caught my ear
October 06, 2019
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She pressed her nose
against the glass
As they passed through those apartment gates
And stopped at last
She was just too old
For the stuffed dog in her hand
And just a bit too young
To truly understand
Dad was gone and she and mom were gonna start brand new
She wiped her eyes and saw those bright blue letters and balloons
Minutes from everywhere
that's what it said
and a single ray of hope
broke through the dark clouds in her head
she heard his voice
she felt his touch
She saw a sign and realized she'd never lose his love
Heaven must be close, it said right there...
Just minutes from everywhere
Her mama turned around
and she forced a smile
She'd been strong for her sad angel
But she was scared and tired
She'd convinced herself
That they might never heal
Then she heard the joy in that girl's voice
So pure so real
mama looky over there, it's gonna be okay
We might not get to see him, but daddy isn't far away
Minutes from everywhere
that's what it said
and a single ray of hope
broke through the dark clouds in her head
she heard his voice
she felt his touch
She saw a sign and realized she'd never lose his love
Heaven must be close, it said right there...
Just minutes from everywhere
They were laughin', they were cryin', they were finally on the mend
Moved in, and on, and lived, and loved, and he watched over them
Minutes from everywhere
that's what it said
and a thousand rays of hope
broke through the dark clouds in their heads
they heard his voice
they felt his touch
they saw the signs and realized, they couldn't lose his love
Heaven must be close, it said right there...
Just minutes from everywhere
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Hey, Michael- thanks for sharing your work with us. Very cool idea. Some good visuals. Nice (sad) surprise at the end of the chorus. Some good work. Keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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Nice song and message the only thing mabey
Try removing some of the she’s. The song sounds good as written just something that caught my ear
October 06, 2019
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James Green
Very nice! Powerful! Great visual.
October 03, 2019
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