Song inspired by a comment from a soon to be divorce'.
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I stood there on the beach
Looking at the morning sun
Remembering how we Loved
To take our morning run
Seems we need to find
The love we let go astray
Signing all those papers
Will make it go away
[Chorus]
Let’s go back to the Beach before tomorrow
Leave our lies back in the bay
Let’s go back to the Beach before tomorrow
And pull our love out of the waves
But, the Beach before tomorrow may be too late
Standing there I wonder
Could this be the end
The last place I remember
We got along as friends
Time will fast forward
Our hair will turn to gray
We can’t wait til tomorrow
What we got to do today
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Well, that title sure made me want to listen! I like the idea of it. Hopeful. I like the chorus. For commercial reasons, I maybe wouldn’t make it a divorce thing. Maybe make it “hurt” you leave in the bay.
It’s kinda confusing that he’s standing at the beach in the first line, but then he’s telling her “let’s go back” like neither is there. Would probably make more sense if he sees an old picture of them happy at the beach.
Maybe verse 1 is how they’re in separate rooms like so often these days… he sees a beach picture of them happy and tells her the chorus. Verse 2 can be what they can do like old times… eat at that little place with the good seafood… try to remember who they used to be…
I think that’ll allow you to do more “showing” instead of “telling.” Hope that helps!
October 04, 2019
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Well, that title sure made me want to listen! I like the idea of it. Hopeful. I like the chorus. For commercial reasons, I maybe wouldn’t make it a divorce thing. Maybe make it “hurt” you leave in the bay.
It’s kinda confusing that he’s standing at the beach in the first line, but then he’s telling her “let’s go back” like neither is there. Would probably make more sense if he sees an old picture of them happy at the beach.
Maybe verse 1 is how they’re in separate rooms like so often these days… he sees a beach picture of them happy and tells her the chorus. Verse 2 can be what they can do like old times… eat at that little place with the good seafood… try to remember who they used to be…
I think that’ll allow you to do more “showing” instead of “telling.” Hope that helps!
October 04, 2019
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