“I would forgive you “ Story behind the song is a break up and intended for a woman to sing.
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I like the feel and the message you are sending
The only thing I would add to what Brent comment
Is try taking out some of the shorter connecting
Words. In some spots it seems a little rushed
It might add better feel to the flow
October 06, 2019
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I would forgive you
(verse)
I've been thinking about the fight we had last night
And I've been wondering who's wrong and who's right
You said some things that you could never unsay
And I'll remember those words until the end of my days
And I don't know how you're gonna to live with yourself tonight
(chorus)
I would forgive you
I’d forget all about the past
I would forgive you
If I really thought that you were sorry
You took the love we had and called it quits
Called me some names and you threw a fit
now you’re sorry and you say you wanna take me back.
D C Well I would forgive you.
I’d forget all the things you said.
I would forgive you
if I really thought that you were sorry
I think its time for me to test my wings
Fly away and cut these apron strings
Ive had enough of you to last me all my life
Bridge
F3 E F D I’m finally strong
C F G A F And I found the strength to carry on
You only want me back cause I don’t want you now.
Running around all over this town.
And now your free to live your life alone without me.
Well I would forgive you.
I’d forget all the things you said.
I would forgive you
if I really thought that you were sorry
I think its time for me to test my wings
Fly away and cut these apron strings
Ive had enough of you to last me all my life
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Hey, JC! Thanks for sharing your work with us. I like the title, because it makes me wonder what the “if” is or the “why haven’t you” is. So that gets me intrigued.
In the 1st verse, there are a lot of common lines, and I’d try to color them up more. Put some imagery, some details, and some specificity in there. That would help it feel a lot more real. Hope that helps!
Keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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I like the feel and the message you are sending
The only thing I would add to what Brent comment
Is try taking out some of the shorter connecting
Words. In some spots it seems a little rushed
It might add better feel to the flow
October 06, 2019
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Brent Baxter
Hey, JC! Thanks for sharing your work with us. I like the title, because it makes me wonder what the “if” is or the “why haven’t you” is. So that gets me intrigued.
In the 1st verse, there are a lot of common lines, and I’d try to color them up more. Put some imagery, some details, and some specificity in there. That would help it feel a lot more real. Hope that helps!
Keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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