A thank you to my grandmother...and maybe to yours too!
Anything is appreciated.
Wow, acoustic feeling is great, very good vocals, song arrangement is also great. Very catchy and creative song.
October 03, 2019
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A lot of cool stuff here. Some great imagery. I’d like the have more “grandma” in the chorus. Not the word, necessarily, but I think it makes the listener wait too long to find out who you’re saluting. I’d paint the picture of her in the rocker or recliner with the blanket over her legs and a sweet smile on her face, etc.
I kinda see everything but her. And did she live with you and that’s what makes “our” home a heaven? It feels like it’s more her home. ??
Hope that helps. Some good work here. Keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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Really like this… great furniture in the detail… This may seem like a small thing but I felt that the first “here’s to you” should come down and intimate… Then the seconds pitch up a little… Then the final one hits high then come down like you do… Just gives that line more intimacy… If you were telling her those words you wouldn’t shout it at her… Or Maybe once!
I’m being picky cos it’s a good song! Well done
October 04, 2019
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I greatly appreciate all the feedback. What support! I will keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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Man a song that can put memories of my own grandma
In my mind. Great job
October 06, 2019
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Corey, i’m glad it struck a chord in you. Thanks for taking the time to listen. -FOX
October 06, 2019
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A chicken's cackle
Transistor static
A hot pot of decaf
Bowl of butter pecan
Sawdust in the driveway
Leftovers in the microwave
Bourbon in a cabinet
Grandpa on a ladder
You got
Shirley Temple and Katharine Hepburn on the t.v.
A quilt in the living room and your dancin' feet
Here's to you
To Bloomingdale's, Rice Krispies
To livin' young, 29 forever
To yellow roses, flowered bed sheets
To makin' home our heaven
Thanks Grandma
Here's to you
A german shepherd
Handwritten letters
Apples in milk crates
Salad on dinner plates
A pack of black licorice
Family photos on the fridge
Scribbles on yellow note pads
Figurines on the mantle
Here's to you
To Bloomingdale's, Rice Krispies
To livin' young, 29 forever
To yellow roses, flowered bed sheets
To makin' home our heaven
Thanks Grandma
Here's to you
Crosswords on the table and cake on the counter
You made village of kids, got all kinds of superpowers
Here's to you
To Bloomingdale's, Rice Krispies
To livin' young, 29 forever
To yellow roses, flowered bed sheets
To makin' home our heaven
Thanks Grandma
Here's to you
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Wow, acoustic feeling is great, very good vocals, song arrangement is also great. Very catchy and creative song.
October 03, 2019
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A lot of cool stuff here. Some great imagery. I’d like the have more “grandma” in the chorus. Not the word, necessarily, but I think it makes the listener wait too long to find out who you’re saluting. I’d paint the picture of her in the rocker or recliner with the blanket over her legs and a sweet smile on her face, etc.
I kinda see everything but her. And did she live with you and that’s what makes “our” home a heaven? It feels like it’s more her home. ??
Hope that helps. Some good work here. Keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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Really like this… great furniture in the detail… This may seem like a small thing but I felt that the first “here’s to you” should come down and intimate… Then the seconds pitch up a little… Then the final one hits high then come down like you do… Just gives that line more intimacy… If you were telling her those words you wouldn’t shout it at her… Or Maybe once!
I’m being picky cos it’s a good song! Well done
October 04, 2019
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I greatly appreciate all the feedback. What support! I will keep writing!
October 04, 2019
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Man a song that can put memories of my own grandma
In my mind. Great job
October 06, 2019
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Corey, i’m glad it struck a chord in you. Thanks for taking the time to listen. -FOX
October 06, 2019
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Joseph Guerra
Sounds like a Brad Paisley tune
October 03, 2019
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