This is an acoustic draft version of what would have electric guitars, bass, drums (can hear a sample of this at the end).
Any lyrical or other suggestions would be welcomed.
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This time you’ve gone too far
and it’s gonna leave a wretched scar
and I don’t know why I left you in my life
It’s time to set you free
If I can’t help you and you can’t help me
But I know, I know I love you so
Heartbreaker, you can make it awful
There’s something I want you to know
I’m shaken, my heart’s breakin’, I can’t do no more
This time I’ve got to let you go
I try to let this go
but my misery begins to show
and you tell me you will try to make things right
It’s time for you to see
that I can’t change you and you can’t change me
But I know, I know I love you so
Heartbreaker, you can make it awful
There’s something I want you to know
I’m shaken, my heart’s breakin’, I can’t do no more
This time I’ve got to let you go
I want you
And you want me too
I need you
And you need me too
It’s time to say goodbye
Cuz I cannot take another night
But I don’t know how to walk on out that door
Someday I hope you’ll see
all the pain you’ve caused and the misery
But I know, I know love you so
Heartbreaker, you can make it awful
There’s something I want you to know
I’m shaken, my heart’s breakin’, I can’t do no more
This time I’ve got to let you go
I need you
and you need me too
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Hi Andrew, sounds great - sounds for me like an ABBA song. You’ve got a lot of talents - really well crafted.
Thy lyric is a bit hard to follow, I think it’s because there is a mixed message in it. I think you want to say something like ‘we cannot stay together, but also we cannot live without each other’ - right? But there is no solution, as a listener I feel a bit confused, do you want to stay with her or not? Don’t make it complicated, it’s just a Pop song.
May 18, 2019
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Frank Renfordt
Hi Andrew, sounds great - sounds for me like an ABBA song. You’ve got a lot of talents - really well crafted.
Thy lyric is a bit hard to follow, I think it’s because there is a mixed message in it. I think you want to say something like ‘we cannot stay together, but also we cannot live without each other’ - right? But there is no solution, as a listener I feel a bit confused, do you want to stay with her or not? Don’t make it complicated, it’s just a Pop song.
May 18, 2019