I song I had put together from a title pop. It started out as Touch of Silk but dropped to just Silk as advised from other pro reviewers. They said not commercial, but seem to have done all I could do. Let me hear your thoughts. I hope you enjoy.
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Hey Kevin, the song is nice and smooth—however, it feels too generic, both musically and lyrically (especially lyrics in the chorus)—in the end, I came away from the song understanding that there’s a guy and a girl in the song who are (maybe, not sure) in some kind of relationship—BUT I DIDN’T REALLY HAVE ANY SPECIFICS (lyrically)—also, musically it reminded me of the country song “Lookin’ For Love In All the Wrong Places.”
Best wishes in all your musical endeavors!
June 12, 2019
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SILK
THAT SEXY WHITE DRESS YOU HAVE ON TONIGHT
YOU SHINE LIKE A DIAMOND IN THE LIGHT
I CAN’T WAIT TO SEE IT FALL TO THE FLOOR
WE LOOK INTO TO EACH OTHERS EYES
TO ME IT’S NO SURPRISE
THE TOUCH OF SILK ON YOUR TAN SKIN
THAT VELVET FEELING DRAWING YOU IN
BRUSHES OF SOFTNESS RISES YOUR SENSES
THE STROKE OF MY HAND IS WITH ALL INTENTION
OF A TOUCH OF SILK Oooo0oo SILK
GIRL TONIGHT I LIE HERE WITH YOU
FEELING THE SHEETS ALL SATIN AND SMOOTH
OUR THOUGHTS WOVEN DEEP IN EACH OTHERS MIND
WE LOOK INTO TO EACH OTHERS EYES
TO ME IT’S NO SURPRISE
THE TOUCH OF SILK ON YOUR TAN SKIN
THAT VELVET FEELING DRAWING YOU IN
BRUSHES OF SOFTNESS RISES YOUR SENSES
THE STROKE OF MY HAND IS WITH ALL INTENTION
OF A TOUCH OF SILK Oooo0oo SILK
WE LOOK INTO TO EACH OTHERS EYES
TO ME IT’S NO SURPRISE
THE TOUCH OF SILK ON YOUR TAN SKIN
THAT VELVET FEELING DRAWING YOU IN
BRUSHES OF SOFTNESS RISES YOUR SENSES
THE STROKE OF MY HAND IS WITH ALL INTENTION
OF A TOUCH OF SILK Ooo0oo SILK
YOU LOVE THE TOUCH OF SILK
Oooo0oo SILK
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Hi Kevin, I love the groove and ‘easy listening’ feeling of the song - really nice! I think you will have to work a bit on the lyric. First I think the breaks between the lines in the verses maybe a bit too long.
I think your set-up line ‘to me it’s no surprise’ is not very strong and doesn’t support the hook, sounds a bit like a forced rhyme. I’m not really sure what you are telling us in the chorus. You have to make it clearer in some way. When I saw the title I thought you would talk about the touch of her silky skin that would make sense to me.
April 29, 2019
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Hey Kevin, the song is nice and smooth—however, it feels too generic, both musically and lyrically (especially lyrics in the chorus)—in the end, I came away from the song understanding that there’s a guy and a girl in the song who are (maybe, not sure) in some kind of relationship—BUT I DIDN’T REALLY HAVE ANY SPECIFICS (lyrically)—also, musically it reminded me of the country song “Lookin’ For Love In All the Wrong Places.”
Best wishes in all your musical endeavors!
June 12, 2019
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Hi Kevin, I love the groove and ‘easy listening’ feeling of the song - really nice! I think you will have to work a bit on the lyric. First I think the breaks between the lines in the verses maybe a bit too long.
I think your set-up line ‘to me it’s no surprise’ is not very strong and doesn’t support the hook, sounds a bit like a forced rhyme. I’m not really sure what you are telling us in the chorus. You have to make it clearer in some way. When I saw the title I thought you would talk about the touch of her silky skin that would make sense to me.
April 29, 2019