Another song I'm working on for an album I'm putting together. Any and all feedback would be very much appreciated. Thank you!
Thanks for your feedback, Lee, and sorry about the slow response. I’m glad you liked the song, and I will definitely take your suggestions into consideration. I’m still working on this one, and trying to get it ready for an album I’m releasing in late April. Thanks again. Your feedback is very much appreciated, indeed.
Cheers . . .
March 25, 2019
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Hobo Heart
Goodbye my friend,
I’m down the road,
The whiskey’s gone now,
Our stories told,
So this hobo heart,
Is bound away,
Where it’ll take me,
I cannot say.
We sang some songs,
We told some lies,
Forgave the foolish,
And praised the wise,
But this hobo heart,
Is bound away now,
We’ll meet again,
Some sunny day.
I love the rock ‘n roll of a 20 car freight,
Clickety clack apoundin’ track to whatever our fate,
Got no place to be, but everywhere to go,
Got an old hobo heart and a rockabye soul,
Distant and lonesome,
That whistle blows,
A mile away now,
It’s time to go,
And this hobo heart,
Is bound away,
Where it takes me,
I just can’t say.
Goodbye my friend,
And fare thee well,
I’m bound away now,
For a good long spell,
But this hobo heart,
Will keep you near,
On down the road,
And through the years.
~~~~~
Bob McPherson © 2018
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Bob,
I like this song. Especially the bridge where the singer explains why he has a hobo heart. Have you thought about reserving the title “hobo heart” to your verses and chorus? This might make the title have a stronger impact when it is heard.
One minor detail—-it may be out of character for a hobo to say “fare there well.”
Again nice work. Enjoyed the song.
March 14, 2019
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Thanks for your feedback, Lee, and sorry about the slow response. I’m glad you liked the song, and I will definitely take your suggestions into consideration. I’m still working on this one, and trying to get it ready for an album I’m releasing in late April. Thanks again. Your feedback is very much appreciated, indeed.
Cheers . . .
March 25, 2019
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Lee Myers
Bob,
I like this song. Especially the bridge where the singer explains why he has a hobo heart. Have you thought about reserving the title “hobo heart” to your verses and chorus? This might make the title have a stronger impact when it is heard.
One minor detail—-it may be out of character for a hobo to say “fare there well.”
Again nice work. Enjoyed the song.
March 14, 2019
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