No particular story behind this one. The chorus came to me as I was driving. Later I wrote the verses around it. I wanted to try writing for the Southern Gospel genre but my concern with this song is that it is not biblical, per se.
Looking for anyone who has knowledge of the Southern Gospel genre...to let me know if this seems like a song that a Southern Gospel quartet would have interest in doing.
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imho, pretty standard EARLY southern gospel—seems that southern gospel these days is often a little bit more “musically adventurous” (again, imho)—best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
October 31, 2018
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Thank you for your feedback Bob. You are absolutely correct. I am such a traditional writer, stuck in a time warp, as the saying goes. I know I lack innovativeness. Not sure what to do about that and likely I am too old now to figure it out. Thanks again for your comment. You were right on.
October 31, 2018
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Thousands or maybe even millions of songs have found their way into our hearts using traditional chord structures. That’s why they became “traditional” forms.
I really like your writing and think this is a very nice song.
I hope Bob Abner doesn’t see my comment…LOL! He is my music theory teacher.
Great job Myrna!
November 12, 2018
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Thank you Reid. I do know there are many bluegrass artists doing traditional bluegrass music at this time. I haven’t been able to connect with them, but I know they are out there. Thanks again for your nice comments.
November 13, 2018
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Hi Myrna,
Love you song!! Just two suggestions and they both involve your chorus. I’d like to hear the melody soar in an upward direction when you get to the chorus. Right now, it’s too melodically similar to the verses. Also, I’d like to see you make it a four-line chorus. For example:
I travel with the Father, and the Holy Ghost
And I’m walking in the shadow of the Son.
Ani Bergman’s avatar
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Ani Bergman
It is catchy, and I like the voice.
October 25, 2018
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Myrna Riquier
Thank you Ani. This demo was done by the Les Butler Quartet.
October 26, 2018
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Bob Abner
imho, pretty standard EARLY southern gospel—seems that southern gospel these days is often a little bit more “musically adventurous” (again, imho)—best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
October 31, 2018
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Myrna Riquier
Thank you for your feedback Bob. You are absolutely correct. I am such a traditional writer, stuck in a time warp, as the saying goes. I know I lack innovativeness. Not sure what to do about that and likely I am too old now to figure it out. Thanks again for your comment. You were right on.
October 31, 2018
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Reid Yamamoto
Thousands or maybe even millions of songs have found their way into our hearts using traditional chord structures. That’s why they became “traditional” forms.
I really like your writing and think this is a very nice song.
I hope Bob Abner doesn’t see my comment…LOL! He is my music theory teacher.
Great job Myrna!
November 13, 2018
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Myrna Riquier
Thank you Reid. I do know there are many bluegrass artists doing traditional bluegrass music at this time. I haven’t been able to connect with them, but I know they are out there. Thanks again for your nice comments.
Jan.11, 2020
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Hi Myrna,
Love your song!! Just two suggestions and they both involve your chorus. I’d like to hear the melody soar in an upward direction when you get to the chorus. Right now, it’s too melodically similar to the verses. Also, I’d like to see you make it a four-line chorus. Just a thought:
I travel with the Father and the Holy Ghost
The show me the road that takes me home
I travel with the Father and Holy Ghost
And I’m walking in the shadow of the Son
January 11, 2020
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Thank you Linne for your suggestions. I try to not write in the same mold as what’s currently happening. I try to be different. But then if I were actually smart at this song writing stuff I wouldn’t have hundreds of songs sitting in my studio drawer dormant forever more. 
So thanks again for your critique. It was certainly valid.
January 11, 2020
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Some days are hard to handle, some nights are way too long
Sometimes the trouble's more than I can bear
But I can get to greener pastures, I can see my way quite clear
I can tell you how I'll get from here to there.
I travel with the Father, and the Holy Ghost
And I'm walking in the shadow of the Son.
When the skies are filled with dark clouds, lightnin’ flashing everywhere
I can move on to a place where skies are fair.
I can walk away from trouble, I can move right past that fire
I can tell you how I'll get from here to there.
I travel with the Father, and the Holy Ghost
And I'm walking in the shadow of the Son.
I have often felt the devil and you know how hard he tries
Just to claim your soul, he'll show up anywhere.
There's a place where he can't reach me, it's the journey that I'm on
I can tell you how I'll get from here to there.
I travel with the Father, and the Holy Ghost
And I'm walking in the shadow of the Son.
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imho, pretty standard EARLY southern gospel—seems that southern gospel these days is often a little bit more “musically adventurous” (again, imho)—best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
October 31, 2018
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Thank you for your feedback Bob. You are absolutely correct. I am such a traditional writer, stuck in a time warp, as the saying goes. I know I lack innovativeness. Not sure what to do about that and likely I am too old now to figure it out. Thanks again for your comment. You were right on.
October 31, 2018
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Thousands or maybe even millions of songs have found their way into our hearts using traditional chord structures. That’s why they became “traditional” forms.
I really like your writing and think this is a very nice song.
I hope Bob Abner doesn’t see my comment…LOL! He is my music theory teacher.
Great job Myrna!
November 12, 2018
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Thank you Reid. I do know there are many bluegrass artists doing traditional bluegrass music at this time. I haven’t been able to connect with them, but I know they are out there. Thanks again for your nice comments.
November 13, 2018
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Hi Myrna,
Love you song!! Just two suggestions and they both involve your chorus. I’d like to hear the melody soar in an upward direction when you get to the chorus. Right now, it’s too melodically similar to the verses. Also, I’d like to see you make it a four-line chorus. For example:
I travel with the Father, and the Holy Ghost
And I’m walking in the shadow of the Son.
Ani Bergman’s avatar
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Ani Bergman
It is catchy, and I like the voice.
October 25, 2018
Myrna Riquier’s avatar
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Myrna Riquier
Thank you Ani. This demo was done by the Les Butler Quartet.
October 26, 2018
Bob Abner’s avatar
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Bob Abner
imho, pretty standard EARLY southern gospel—seems that southern gospel these days is often a little bit more “musically adventurous” (again, imho)—best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
October 31, 2018
Myrna Riquier’s avatar
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Myrna Riquier
Thank you for your feedback Bob. You are absolutely correct. I am such a traditional writer, stuck in a time warp, as the saying goes. I know I lack innovativeness. Not sure what to do about that and likely I am too old now to figure it out. Thanks again for your comment. You were right on.
October 31, 2018
Reid Yamamoto’s avatar
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Reid Yamamoto
Thousands or maybe even millions of songs have found their way into our hearts using traditional chord structures. That’s why they became “traditional” forms.
I really like your writing and think this is a very nice song.
I hope Bob Abner doesn’t see my comment…LOL! He is my music theory teacher.
Great job Myrna!
November 13, 2018
Myrna Riquier’s avatar
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Myrna Riquier
Thank you Reid. I do know there are many bluegrass artists doing traditional bluegrass music at this time. I haven’t been able to connect with them, but I know they are out there. Thanks again for your nice comments.
Jan.11, 2020
Linne Black’s avatar
Hi Myrna,
Love your song!! Just two suggestions and they both involve your chorus. I’d like to hear the melody soar in an upward direction when you get to the chorus. Right now, it’s too melodically similar to the verses. Also, I’d like to see you make it a four-line chorus. Just a thought:
I travel with the Father and the Holy Ghost
The show me the road that takes me home
I travel with the Father and Holy Ghost
And I’m walking in the shadow of the Son
January 11, 2020
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Thank you Linne for your suggestions. I try to not write in the same mold as what’s currently happening. I try to be different. But then if I were actually smart at this song writing stuff I wouldn’t have hundreds of songs sitting in my studio drawer dormant forever more. So thanks again for your critique. It was certainly valid.
January 11, 2020
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Ani Bergman
It is catchy, and I like the voice.
October 25, 2018
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