This is one of my latest efforts and performed by A Writer's Paradise.
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Hi Charles, the song is catchy and nicely produced. I don’t know if this cheerful melody matches the lyrics. But otherwise, it’s really well done and reminds me of Easton Corbin. Good luck!
August 09, 2018
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Wow, awesome song Charles! You sound like a pro Nashville writer with your lyrics, very strong message, style, arrangement and production! I love it! Is that you singing it?
August 09, 2018
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This is a good one Charles! And thanks for the A Writer’s Paradise shout out. That’s a great place with talented folks! Your HWY 55 ride to Blytheville & Memphis definitely strikes a good chord here!
August 10, 2018
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Shane, thanks for listening and commenting. I agree, A Writer’s Paradise is a top notch outfit. I assume you are from the Memphis area? My cousins from Blytheville got a kick out of that reference. I was born in Memphis but haven’t been there for several years. Chuck
August 10, 2018
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That spring in the couch keeps jabbing in my side
Things that we said, replaying in my mind
Won’t be no sleeping
Beer cans piled up by an old pizza box
I try reaching out but you don’t wanna talk
I’m barely breathing
I’m trying to keep faith but its fading fast
We’re heading for a cliff with our foot on the gas
We gotta PUMP THE BRAKES girl
Oh, for heaven’s sakes girl
I’ll do whatever it takes girl
To keep our love alive
I can’t imagine a future without you being in it
It’s time to face the facts, there’s only one way to skin it
Make no mistake girl
We gotta PUMP THE BRAKES
We used to take a Harley ride down Highway 55
Grab some barbeque in Memphis, visit family in Blytheville
Now I’m dreaming
I must have dozed off, taken back to a time
When we counted shooting stars under the neon sky
Always believing
I can’t let go, can’t let it end like that
We don’t have to hit the wall, babe we don’t have to crash
We gotta PUMP THE BRAKES girl
Oh, for heaven’s sakes girl
Let’s do whatever it takes girl
To keep our love alive
I can’t imagine a future without you being in it
It’s time to face the facts, there’s only one way to skin it
Make no mistake girl
We gotta PUMP THE BRAKES
(Instrumental)
What we can’t undo, we can move on past
We don’t have to hit the wall, babe we don’t have to crash
(Chorus- 2nd version)
We gotta PUMP THE BRAKES girl (repeat to end w/ ad lib)
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A lot to like about this song (lead vocals, band, production, fairly clever lyrics, musically pretty catchy, etc.)
One thing that put me off a little: I thought it was (chord-wise) awkward moving out of the instrumental section into “What we can’t undo, we can move on past”—you were going back and forth between the E major chord and the C-sharp minor chord—but you ended the instrumental section on a C-sharp minor chord, so you’re already on the chord that starts the “What we can’t undo section”—SO THAT NEW SECTION LOSES IT’S INITIAL PUNCH (because you’re already just sitting on the C-sharp minor chord)—your instrumental section has taken some of the energy out of the new section. Hope that made sense.
There is MUCH that I like about your song, but that small thing (which IS basically small and easily edited) needlessly takes away from your song.
Best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
August 09, 2018
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Hi Charles, the song is catchy and nicely produced. I don’t know if this cheerful melody matches the lyrics. But otherwise, it’s really well done and reminds me of Easton Corbin. Good luck!
August 09, 2018
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Wow, awesome song Charles! You sound like a pro Nashville writer with your lyrics, very strong message, style, arrangement and production! I love it! Is that you singing it?
August 09, 2018
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This is a good one Charles! And thanks for the A Writer’s Paradise shout out. That’s a great place with talented folks! Your HWY 55 ride to Blytheville & Memphis definitely strikes a good chord here!
August 10, 2018
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Shane, thanks for listening and commenting. I agree, A Writer’s Paradise is a top notch outfit. I assume you are from the Memphis area? My cousins from Blytheville got a kick out of that reference. I was born in Memphis but haven’t been there for several years. Chuck
August 10, 2018
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A lot to like about this song (lead vocals, band, production, fairly clever lyrics, musically pretty catchy, etc.)
One thing that put me off a little: I thought it was (chord-wise) awkward moving out of the instrumental section into “What we can’t undo, we can move on past”—you were going back and forth between the E major chord and the C-sharp minor chord—but you ended the instrumental section on a C-sharp minor chord, so you’re already on the chord that starts the “What we can’t undo section”—SO THAT NEW SECTION LOSES IT’S INITIAL PUNCH (because you’re already just sitting on the C-sharp minor chord)—your instrumental section has taken some of the energy out of the new section. Hope that made sense.
There is MUCH that I like about your song, but that small thing (which IS basically small and easily edited) needlessly takes away from your song.
Best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
August 09, 2018
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