The best advice I know is to chip away the stone, and find a heart that's hard to hurt.
I lovr these lyrics! Great music as always!! ‘Hard to hurt a heart’s that broke’. Love that line and hope I quoted it correctly:).
February 13, 2018
‘It’s hard to hurt a heart that’s broke’ is a damn good line, Kay’s right.
February 15, 2018
One little thing I noticed when I first heard the song:
When the piece starts out, your narrator speaks about the girl and the guys hitting on her in third person. But on the second line of the second stanza, he switches to second person—which, in English, can be almost as vague as an indefinite pronoun, since male, female, singular and plural are all referenced by a single word.
For an instant, I found myself wondering whether the narrator was identifying with the girl or the guys hitting on her. My first instinct was to go with the girl—that’s the nearest antecedent and probably who the song is going to be about. But when the next lines of the lyrics tell us how our narrator is trying to get up the courage to speak to her, I figured I was wrong—he must be empathizing with the guys who are getting shot down.
It isn’t until later in the song that we learn the narrator and the girl have self-medicating issues in common. So I realized I was mistaken about being mistaken. Which left me being slightly taken out of the piece a total of three times.
Now I’m kind of old and not necessarily the brightest bulb in the room and looking back at the lyrics, it seems like your intention probably should have been clearer to me than it was. But sticking to third person before he starts talking to her would eliminate any possible ambiguity. So if you ever decide to go back and tinker with the piece, it might be something to consider tinkering with.
February 17, 2018
Thanks everyone for your comments. I appreciate ALL of them.
Best,
Marvin
February 19, 2018
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“Whiskey on the rocks as mortar and stone” “Said if you don’t fill up life’s suitcase it’s just a wasted trip”
great Lines Marvin
March 17, 2018
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Nice song—“If you don’t fill up life’s suitcase, it’s just a wasted trip” is a great line, the sort of line I see in your songs fairly often!!! Good song, though for some reason, the song felt a little “loose” (not tightened up enough, I guess is what I’m trying to say). These types of songs seem to be a forte of yours.
July 21, 2018
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She sat alone and faced an empty chair
And raised a toast to the empty air
Shootin’ down men’s pride - with every come on line
She was drinkin’ straight Beam in a glass
And I was thinkin’ I’ve been where you’re at
The later I watched - the braver I got
So in my most sincere tone - I asked “on the rebound?”
As I braced for the storm - instead - she said - “sit down”
She said it’s hard to hurt a heart that’s already broke
Surrounded by a wall so it can be alone
Using whiskey on the rocks as the mortar and stone
It’s hard to hurt a heart that’s broke
I heard about all his cheatin’ ways
She kicked him out, said she felt betrayed
But the longer we talked - the softer she got
I said I know my advice - is the last thing that you want
As I braced for fire and ice - instead - she said - go on
I said it’s hard to hurt a heart that’s already broke
Surrounded by a wall so it can be alone
Using whiskey on the rocks as the mortar and stone
It’s hard to hurt a heart that’s broke
I said I laid stone four years ago on a wall around my heart
Thinkin’ that my only hope was to drink away her scar
Till someone set me straight and taught me to forget
Said if you don’t fill up life’s suitcase it’s just a wasted trip
It’s hard to love a heart scared of being broke
Surrounded by a wall so it can be alone
So the best advice I know is to chip away the stone
And find a love that’s hard to hurt
You’ll find a love that’s hard to hurt
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Oh my gosh, love it. The bridge was amazing. Actually I felt that was more powerful than the chorus. You might wanna consider that if you wanna develop the song to better. Loved the lyrics also, I felt like I would love to sing those words xD
February 13, 2018
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I lovr these lyrics! Great music as always!! ‘Hard to hurt a heart’s that broke’. Love that line and hope I quoted it correctly:).
February 13, 2018
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‘It’s hard to hurt a heart that’s broke’ is a damn good line, Kay’s right.
February 15, 2018
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One little thing I noticed when I first heard the song:
When the piece starts out, your narrator speaks about the girl and the guys hitting on her in third person. But on the second line of the second stanza, he switches to second person—which, in English, can be almost as vague as an indefinite pronoun, since male, female, singular and plural are all referenced by a single word.
For an instant, I found myself wondering whether the narrator was identifying with the girl or the guys hitting on her. My first instinct was to go with the girl—that’s the nearest antecedent and probably who the song is going to be about. But when the next lines of the lyrics tell us how our narrator is trying to get up the courage to speak to her, I figured I was wrong—he must be empathizing with the guys who are getting shot down.
It isn’t until later in the song that we learn the narrator and the girl have self-medicating issues in common. So I realized I was mistaken about being mistaken. Which left me being slightly taken out of the piece a total of three times.
Now I’m kind of old and not necessarily the brightest bulb in the room and looking back at the lyrics, it seems like your intention probably should have been clearer to me than it was. But sticking to third person before he starts talking to her would eliminate any possible ambiguity. So if you ever decide to go back and tinker with the piece, it might be something to consider tinkering with.
February 17, 2018
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Thanks everyone for your comments. I appreciate ALL of them.
Best,
Marvin
February 19, 2018
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“Whiskey on the rocks as mortar and stone” “Said if you don’t fill up life’s suitcase it’s just a wasted trip”
great Lines Marvin
March 17, 2018
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Nice song—“If you don’t fill up life’s suitcase, it’s just a wasted trip” is a great line, the sort of line I see in your songs fairly often!!! Good song, though for some reason, the song felt a little “loose” (not tightened up enough, I guess is what I’m trying to say). These types of songs seem to be a forte of yours.
July 21, 2018
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Oh my gosh, love it. The bridge was amazing. Actually I felt that was more powerful than the chorus. You might wanna consider that if you wanna develop the song to better. Loved the lyrics also, I felt like I would love to sing those words xD
February 13, 2018