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When it was more than a crush
any, on melody, lyrics, I am going to be putting an acoustic arrangement to this song. Thank you in advance!
Hey Amber! this has really cool phrasing, makes it very catchy. And it’s a great lift at the chorus, too..my only suggestion may be to tag your title “I Didn’t Know” on to the end of the chorus again…then there’s no doubt it’s the focus point. Great work, I’d love to hear this when you get instrumentation on it!
July 13, 2017
Thank you Phillip and Dave for taking the time to give me feedback and comment on my songs. I will post this again, Dave, when I get an acoustic arrangement to it. Thanks again!
July 13, 2017
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I Didn't Know
you text me
say hey I'm coming over
look out your window
left flowers on your rover
oh oh oh woah oh
you couldnt sleep
cause I was in your dreams
love that feeling
when you are with me
oh oh oh whoah oh
chorus
I didn't know no I didn't know
that I could be kissable, likable
until you showed me eheheh
I didn't know no I didn't know
that I could be strong
and weak in the knees eheheh
every day is is such a rush
I can't believe that your in looove
with me
my face turns red
i say all the wrong things
you start to laugh
say you do the same things
oh oh oh whoah oh
hikin' fishin'
lovin the outdoors
Imma hot mess
still pull me in closer
chorus (repeat)
bridge
I didn't know
no I didn't know
no I didn't know
Chorus (repeat)
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Amber… the 1st verse isn’t easy to follow.
Easier to follow like this:
You text me, say you’re coming over
I should look out my window
You left flowers on my Rover
Who is saying “love that feeling”, you or him?
Phillip
July 13, 2017
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Hey Amber! this has really cool phrasing, makes it very catchy. And it’s a great lift at the chorus, too..my only suggestion may be to tag your title “I Didn’t Know” on to the end of the chorus again…then there’s no doubt it’s the focus point. Great work, I’d love to hear this when you get instrumentation on it!
July 13, 2017
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Thank you Phillip and Dave for taking the time to give me feedback and comment on my songs. I will post this again, Dave, when I get an acoustic arrangement to it. Thanks again!
July 13, 2017
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Phillip Lemmonds
Amber… the 1st verse isn’t easy to follow.
Easier to follow like this:
You text me, say you’re coming over
I should look out my window
You left flowers on my Rover
Who is saying “love that feeling”, you or him?
Phillip
July 13, 2017