This song is about a failed relationship due to the ego of one person and it`s a reminder of values that are there but not always noticed until......comes a day
Hey, Barry- thanks for sharing your song with us! I like that even though it’s kinda ballad, the phrasing moves enough to give it energy. I also like the title.
However, for me, there aren’t enough specifics in the song to grab my emotions. The 1st verse is basically, “We have a past and a present. It’s been a year. Sometimes we don’t say what we really feel.” I don’t have any idea what’s going on. It seems to just be telling me commonplace facts. I’m missing something that will reach out and get my attention. Something that makes me immediately want to hear more.
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June 13, 2017
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Thanks for your feedback Brent. Understand what you mean about commonplace facts but if one looks at the overall message it`s saying `be real, otherwise, you could destroy any future happiness that may be there for you and each verse reinforces this as in `embrace all that`s there`
Still, at the same time, I will still have a second look at my lyrics as I realize that country music likes to `paint a picture` and there must be some middle ground for me somewhere.
June 13, 2017
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COMES A DAY
THERE`S TIMES THAT ARE GONE
AND NOW DAYS THAT ARE HERE
AND AS I THINK BACK
I CAN COUNT ONE MORE YEAR
SOMETIMES THINGS WE SAY
DO NOT MEAN WHAT WE FEEL
AND NOW AND AGAIN
WE ALL FAIL TO BE REAL
I WAS YOUR FRIEND
AND LEFT YOU......WENT AWAY
AND YOU`LL MISS......
COMES A TIME.....COMES A DAY
WHAT WERE YOU ALL ABOUT
WITH YOUR HEAD IN THE CLOUDS
YOU ALMOST HAD IT ALL
HOW ARE YOU NOW... WERE YOU TOLD?
YOU`LL WAIT AROUND AND HOPE
FOR YOUR LIFE....NOW TO FIND
BUT STILL MISS WHAT`S THERE
AND I ASK......WHERE YOU BLIND?
I WAS YOUR FRIEND
AND LEFT YOU....WENT AWAY
AND YOU`LL MISS.....
COMES A TIME......COMES A DAY
YOU ALWAYS HAD A CHOICE
TO EMBRACE ALL THAT`S THERE
TO LIVE FOR TODAY
AND TO SHOW THAT YOU CARE
I HOPE YOU THINK ABOUT
ALL MY WORDS IN YOUR MIND
AND AS THE YEARS GO BY
I STILL ASK.....WHERE YOU BLIND?
I WAS YOUR FRIEND
AND LEFT YOU.....WENT AWAY
AND YOU`LL MISS .....
COMES A TIME....COMES A DAY
I WAS YOUR FRIEND
AND LEFT YOU.....WENT AWAY
AND YOU`LL MISS.....
COMES A TIME....COMES A DAY
AND YOU`LL MISS .....
COMES A TIME...COMES A DAY
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Hi Barry… a nice song. I think the singer should have redone the opening line as she didn’t hit the note very well and is a bit flat. As it is the first line of the song it is all the more important for demo purposes.
I do like her voice however. Very nice texture. Overall nice song and production.
June 10, 2017
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Hey, Barry- thanks for sharing your song with us! I like that even though it’s kinda ballad, the phrasing moves enough to give it energy. I also like the title.
However, for me, there aren’t enough specifics in the song to grab my emotions. The 1st verse is basically, “We have a past and a present. It’s been a year. Sometimes we don’t say what we really feel.” I don’t have any idea what’s going on. It seems to just be telling me commonplace facts. I’m missing something that will reach out and get my attention. Something that makes me immediately want to hear more.
Hope that helps. Please pay it forward by leaving a comment or review on another writer’s song. Thanks!
June 13, 2017
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Thanks for your feedback Brent. Understand what you mean about commonplace facts but if one looks at the overall message it`s saying `be real, otherwise, you could destroy any future happiness that may be there for you and each verse reinforces this as in `embrace all that`s there`
Still, at the same time, I will still have a second look at my lyrics as I realize that country music likes to `paint a picture` and there must be some middle ground for me somewhere.
June 13, 2017
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Hi Barry… a nice song. I think the singer should have redone the opening line as she didn’t hit the note very well and is a bit flat. As it is the first line of the song it is all the more important for demo purposes.
I do like her voice however. Very nice texture. Overall nice song and production.
June 10, 2017
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