Apologies to real country music folk if this song doesn`t fit the true scene but I was struggling to find a genre for it.
The song is about a man who has lost faith in society and is traveling through life with his `own` values.
Thank you for the feedback again Robert, I must have another listen to your point about the piano section.That is invaluable about this site isn`t It ? You can have a different perspective by someone else on your music….great
June 11, 2017
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Nice melody, nice voice—I’d cut out the verse apologizing for your voice. Overall, very lyrically vague, and I don’t know why you titled it “Nothing to Give” instead of “Flying High Today.” I would like to see more about what is going on in the story. Did a tragedy occur that you’re trying to rise above? Are you a traveling singer?
You have this verse:
IT`S A NEW DAY NOW, IT`S A NEW TOWN
SO MANY EYES AROUND, BUT MINE ARE DOWN
NOTHING IS PLANNED NOW, JUST OPTING OUT
THE DECISION WAS ALL MINE, DIDN`T NEED A VOTE
It seems like there’s a story to tell, but you’re not telling it. Why did you opt out?
Think of the senses—sight, sound, feel, taste, smell—and see if you can paint a picture of what’s going on.
June 15, 2017
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HI Michael, thanks for your feedback. I titled the song `Nothing to Give` because the singer has had enough of the cynicism of people, so he was saying `no thanks, for the moment I don’t want to mix with anyone`. I suppose that this could be classed as an inner sense if one is looking for senses. As for vagueness, It`s probably my style as some time back now I was advised not to make the story too simple and leave a line for `pondering`by the listener. David Bowie was a great exponent of this way of writing, although his music and arrangements for his songs `said everything`. Regards
June 15, 2017
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NOTHING TO GIVE
I`M TRAVELLING LIGHT NOW, I`M ON MY OWN
IT`S JUST ANOTHER DAY, ANOTHER TOWN
NO ROUTE IS PLANNED NOW, NOTHING IS VIEWED
IT`S JUST CALLED SOLITUDE, AN INTERLUDE
I AM FLYING HIGH TODAY
AND I`M FEELING GOOD IN MY OWN COMPANY
DON`T WANT TO STOP, DON`T WANT TO MEET
OTHERS WHO WANT FROM ME
I HAVEN`T GOT AN IMMACULATE VOICE
BUT STILL, I SING TODAY, CAUSE THAT`S MY CHOICE
I`M SINGING ALONE NOW, JUST SINGING FOR ME
I KNOW IT GIVES ME, SOME SANCTUARY
I AM FLYING HIGH TODAY
AND I`M FEELING GOOD, IN MY OWN COMPANY
DON`T WANT TO STOP NOW, DON`T WANT TO MEET
OTHERS WHO WANT FROM ME
IT`S A NEW DAY NOW, IT`S A NEW TOWN
SO MANY EYES AROUND, BUT MINE ARE DOWN
NOTHING IS PLANNED NOW, JUST OPTING OUT
THE DECISION WAS ALL MINE, DIDN`T NEED A VOTE
KEEP ON FLYING ON YOUR WAY
MAKE A DIFFERENCE TO YOU EVERY DAY
KEEP ON SINGING DON`T BE FAZED
BY THOSE WHO SAY THEY`VE GOT IT MADE
STAY TRUE TO THE VALUES YOU HOLD
THEN YOU CAN THEN SAY, THERE`S NO REGRET
STAY TRUE AND YOU THEN MAY FIND
THERE`S SOMEONE THERE
NOT YET MET
KEEP ON FLYING ON YOUR WAY
MAKE A DIFFERENCE TO YOU EVERY DAY
KEEP ON SINGING NOW DON`T BE FAZED
BY OTHERS WHO SAY THEY'VE GOT IT MADE
OH I AM
I`M FLYING HIGH
OH I AM
I`M FLYING HIGH
IT`S ANOTHER NEW DAY... TODAY
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Agree Barry… not sure what genre this would be today. It is folk-country such as the singer-songwriters that were big in the 70s such as Carol King, Jim Croce and Gordon Lightfoot. This therefore might be considered “never really in style but never out of style”. It is a singer-songwriter type of thing. I enjoyed it.
I would have kept the piano out of it and only had strings come in to enhance later in the song (as you eventually did). The piano (like the guitar) is percussive and they clashed (at least I felt they did).
Certainly is a “lone highway” song lyric-wise. I am surprised with the use of the word ‘immaculate’ but it didn’t jump out at me when listening so it must have worked. And the song is uplifting from this man’s singing the song and his introspective world-view.
Good job.
June 11, 2017
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Thank you for the feedback again Robert, I must have another listen to your point about the piano section.That is invaluable about this site isn`t It ? You can have a different perspective by someone else on your music….great
June 11, 2017
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Nice melody, nice voice—I’d cut out the verse apologizing for your voice. Overall, very lyrically vague, and I don’t know why you titled it “Nothing to Give” instead of “Flying High Today.” I would like to see more about what is going on in the story. Did a tragedy occur that you’re trying to rise above? Are you a traveling singer?
You have this verse:
IT`S A NEW DAY NOW, IT`S A NEW TOWN
SO MANY EYES AROUND, BUT MINE ARE DOWN
NOTHING IS PLANNED NOW, JUST OPTING OUT
THE DECISION WAS ALL MINE, DIDN`T NEED A VOTE
It seems like there’s a story to tell, but you’re not telling it. Why did you opt out?
Think of the senses—sight, sound, feel, taste, smell—and see if you can paint a picture of what’s going on.
June 15, 2017
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HI Michael, thanks for your feedback. I titled the song `Nothing to Give` because the singer has had enough of the cynicism of people, so he was saying `no thanks, for the moment I don’t want to mix with anyone`. I suppose that this could be classed as an inner sense if one is looking for senses. As for vagueness, It`s probably my style as some time back now I was advised not to make the story too simple and leave a line for `pondering`by the listener. David Bowie was a great exponent of this way of writing, although his music and arrangements for his songs `said everything`. Regards
June 15, 2017
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Agree Barry… not sure what genre this would be today. It is folk-country such as the singer-songwriters that were big in the 70s such as Carol King, Jim Croce and Gordon Lightfoot. This therefore might be considered “never really in style but never out of style”. It is a singer-songwriter type of thing. I enjoyed it.
I would have kept the piano out of it and only had strings come in to enhance later in the song (as you eventually did). The piano (like the guitar) is percussive and they clashed (at least I felt they did).
Certainly is a “lone highway” song lyric-wise. I am surprised with the use of the word ‘immaculate’ but it didn’t jump out at me when listening so it must have worked. And the song is uplifting from this man’s singing the song and his introspective world-view.
Good job.
June 11, 2017
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