where we live in Arkansas, just south of our little ranch is a ridgeline, the Waldron Ridge... at just the right moment, when the sun peeks over the ridge it shines thru our bedroom window, dances across Rita Sue's face and thus the song ... kind of a self portrait of us ...
one of those "just kinda for me" tunes ... feel free to enjoy and picture yourself with a love like this ...
Hey Gregg,
A pretty good song! Like it a lot.
I agree with Brent just because I personally like things a bit more complicated and ambiguous, even though the genre seems to discourage that. Again, I like your work.
Keep writing!
Jack
May 04, 2017
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Hey Gregg,
This song has got a good feel to it (actually all of your songs do). I agree with Brent that lyrics would be helpful but, as you noted, this is a “just for you” kind of song so I’m not sure I’d really have any “critique” per se. Your stuff also doesn’t quite fit in my wheelhouse either for what I know or am tyring to do myself - but it’s got a good sound and I still wanted to say good job! The recording and arrangement is good and the lyrics feel like they flow well - keep it up!
May 04, 2017
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i new here Greg
the song is nice not got a lot of experience in knowing whats right or wrong but i like the feel of it
May 09, 2017
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Hey, Gregg! Thanks for sharing your work. Hey, if you can post lyrics next time, it’ll help us dig in a little more deeply. I like the easy feel of the song and how you get right into the chorus. A lot of nice imagery.
In the 2nd verse, I started feeling a little lost- wondering where it was going. You brought it back around in that last line, but it felt a little like a detour. But by the end, you weave both threads so it’s all working together.
I wonder, though, if the hook/title should be something that works more on both the spiritual and marital levels. Something like “in heaven with you.” Our home is heaven with you. Then the literal Heaven with you. Something like that might tie the two themes of your song together better. Just a thought.
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Hey Gregg,
A pretty good song! Like it a lot.
I agree with Brent just because I personally like things a bit more complicated and ambiguous, even though the genre seems to discourage that. Again, I like your work.
Keep writing!
Jack
May 04, 2017
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Hey Gregg,
This song has got a good feel to it (actually all of your songs do). I agree with Brent that lyrics would be helpful but, as you noted, this is a “just for you” kind of song so I’m not sure I’d really have any “critique” per se. Your stuff also doesn’t quite fit in my wheelhouse either for what I know or am tyring to do myself - but it’s got a good sound and I still wanted to say good job! The recording and arrangement is good and the lyrics feel like they flow well - keep it up!
May 04, 2017
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i new here Greg
the song is nice not got a lot of experience in knowing whats right or wrong but i like the feel of it
May 09, 2017
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Hey, Gregg! Thanks for sharing your work. Hey, if you can post lyrics next time, it’ll help us dig in a little more deeply. I like the easy feel of the song and how you get right into the chorus. A lot of nice imagery.
In the 2nd verse, I started feeling a little lost- wondering where it was going. You brought it back around in that last line, but it felt a little like a detour. But by the end, you weave both threads so it’s all working together.
I wonder, though, if the hook/title should be something that works more on both the spiritual and marital levels. Something like “in heaven with you.” Our home is heaven with you. Then the literal Heaven with you. Something like that might tie the two themes of your song together better. Just a thought.
Please pay this forward by leaving a comment or review on another writer’s song. Thanks!
May 04, 2017
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