A short telling of the gospel reframed as the rescue plan. Primarily for an unchurched audience as a introduction to God's plan to save us. Written in open D tuning.
Anything really, lyrical, melody production (I think I may have too much verb on the vox).
Hi Mary. Thanks for taking the time to listen and for your kind words. I sort of tried to put some dynamics in the penultimate verse and you can kind of hear a melody line forming in the outro that could end up as a chorus instead. I’ll give a key change some though too (although it’s tricky in open D tuning!)
February 24, 2016
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Hi, David! Thanks for sharing your song. While I dig the title, if I heard it live and then wanted to find it online to buy it, I wouldn’t search for “The Rescue Plan.” I’d look for “He Reached Down” or “Rescue Me.” You want your song to be findable! Also, what if you change “He reached down to rescue me” to “He reached down to you and me” since you said the song is aimed at the unchurched. That way, it puts them in the song, not just you the singer. Then you could title it “He Reached Down.” Also, I’m with Mary- I wanted more melodic variety. After two verses, even though I like what you have, I was ready for something new melodically. Hope that helps! I’d love to hear another one from you!
January 12, 2017
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Hi David,
One of the unchurched here… I like your song and am surprised no one clicked the “Like” button after several hundred views.
I agree with Mary and Brent that you need to add more melody but I approach the need from a slightly different perspective: believe it or not, even we, the unchurched know the story and the reason we listen to your song is to experience it emotionally one more time with you. It is a very dramatic story and the music should help us experience it more fully. My 2 cents.
May 03, 2017
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I agree! Basically the whole song sits on the same energy level; sadly (imho) this means the song doesn’t reach out and grab the listener nearly as much as it could (because there are some very nice things happening musically and lyrically in this song).
I DO think you did some very nice things in this song—I just wish the song “grabbed” the listener as much as it should.
Anyway, best wishes with your songwriting efforts.
August 08, 2018
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He looked down, on broken man and He devised a rescue plan
He reached down, to set men free. He reached down to rescue me.
He sent His son to Bethlehem, to live among the common men
He reached down, to set men free. He reached down to rescue me.
He came to teach, he came to heal, in synagogues and barley fields.
He reached down, to set men free. He reached down to rescue me.
They took His life, upon the cross, disciples fled, for all was lost
But He looked down on broken man and caused his Son to rise again.
Death has lost and hope has won, the revolution has begun
He reached down, to set men free. He reached down to rescue me.
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Hi David, I think this is a pretty song, and played well on the guitar. I did feel that it could go somewhere else to give it some variety. You chose not to do a chorus which is ok, but I felt like it could change up somewhat to keep the listeners attention.
February 24, 2016
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Hi Mary. Thanks for taking the time to listen and for your kind words. I sort of tried to put some dynamics in the penultimate verse and you can kind of hear a melody line forming in the outro that could end up as a chorus instead. I’ll give a key change some though too (although it’s tricky in open D tuning!)
February 24, 2016
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Hi, David! Thanks for sharing your song. While I dig the title, if I heard it live and then wanted to find it online to buy it, I wouldn’t search for “The Rescue Plan.” I’d look for “He Reached Down” or “Rescue Me.” You want your song to be findable! Also, what if you change “He reached down to rescue me” to “He reached down to you and me” since you said the song is aimed at the unchurched. That way, it puts them in the song, not just you the singer. Then you could title it “He Reached Down.” Also, I’m with Mary- I wanted more melodic variety. After two verses, even though I like what you have, I was ready for something new melodically. Hope that helps! I’d love to hear another one from you!
January 12, 2017
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Hi David,
One of the unchurched here… I like your song and am surprised no one clicked the “Like” button after several hundred views.
I agree with Mary and Brent that you need to add more melody but I approach the need from a slightly different perspective: believe it or not, even we, the unchurched know the story and the reason we listen to your song is to experience it emotionally one more time with you. It is a very dramatic story and the music should help us experience it more fully. My 2 cents.
May 03, 2017
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I agree! Basically the whole song sits on the same energy level; sadly (imho) this means the song doesn’t reach out and grab the listener nearly as much as it could (because there are some very nice things happening musically and lyrically in this song).
I DO think you did some very nice things in this song—I just wish the song “grabbed” the listener as much as it should.
Anyway, best wishes with your songwriting efforts.
August 08, 2018
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Hi David, I think this is a pretty song, and played well on the guitar. I did feel that it could go somewhere else to give it some variety. You chose not to do a chorus which is ok, but I felt like it could change up somewhat to keep the listeners attention.
February 24, 2016
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