What happened in Paris also happened in Mumbai (India) a few years ago.
As songwriters, we can contribute in different ways. I wrote, "Take A Stand" as a wakeup call, just a few months ago.
Hi JC!
Thank you for giving it a listen and for your feedback.
Yes, that’s the first thing I noticed when I got the demo - the words are not clear in the verses, though the session vocalist did a good job otherwise.
To compensate for this, I got a lyric video made. Here’s the link, in case you’d like to check it out on YouTube where it’s gotten over 6500 views in the last 3-4 days: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lQN3leQZfpk
Thanks again!
November 22, 2015
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Very cool song. It’s loaded with images (though sometimes weird images), but really good stuff. Great chorus. I truly like it.
December 17, 2015
Thank you, Dick! I followed the steps in Andea Stolpe’s book - what she calls, “Destination Writing” - to generate those images and lyric phrases:)
December 20, 2015
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V1: Strung up high against the dappled wall
of a machine gun-strafed military canteen
A shard of light she stood tall
stripped of everything but her G-String
A soldier’s helmet round her headstock
an empty magazine was her waistband
Conde just refused to rock
she held her ground kept her poise, and she took a stand
V2: I strode up across the cratered floor
kicking shrapnel, empty bullets and shells askew
I lifted her right off the wall, out the door
a soldier laying claim to what was his due
I found a sounding board in Conde
she said if you can change the world and you can just give a hand
help make a world for you and me
hold your ground, keep your poise, and take a stand
Ch: Music is freedom when freedom is all but gone
you’re free to choose right from wrong
You got to take a stand before it’s too late
safeguard your freedom and your fate
V3: Sounds of guns died in the distance
I lost touch with Conde and the songs we wrote
They filled the deafening silence
word by word, chord by chord, note by note
Conde knew I’d return one day
cuz with every change of heart there’s a change of hand
kneeling by the case where she lay
I held her close, kept my word and took a stand
Ch: Music is freedom when freedom is all but gone
you’re free to choose right from wrong
You got to take a stand before it’s too late
safeguard your freedom and your fate
Bridge: You can’t pretend to be tone deaf all the time
and seek solace in a bottle of wine
you wanna keep the flag of freedom flying high
you gotta make choices with no the compromises
Ch: Music is freedom when freedom is all but gone
you’re free to choose right from wrong
You got to take a stand before it’s too late
safeguard your freedom and your fate
Noel Gama (c) 2015
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I like it. The Melody the tones the vocal technic is cool but I can’t really understand your words clearly in the verses. The words in the chorus and bridge I could understand very clearly. Maybe it’s harder to make out the words in the verses because the vocal technic is stronger.
November 21, 2015
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Hi JC!
Thank you for giving it a listen and for your feedback.
Yes, that’s the first thing I noticed when I got the demo - the words are not clear in the verses, though the session vocalist did a good job otherwise.
To compensate for this, I got a lyric video made. Here’s the link, in case you’d like to check it out on YouTube where it’s gotten over 6500 views in the last 3-4 days: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lQN3leQZfpk
Thanks again!
November 22, 2015
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Very cool song. It’s loaded with images (though sometimes weird images), but really good stuff. Great chorus. I truly like it.
December 17, 2015
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Thank you, Dick! I followed the steps in Andea Stolpe’s book - what she calls, “Destination Writing” - to generate those images and lyric phrases:)
December 20, 2015
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Jamie Wilkinson
I like it. The Melody the tones the vocal technic is cool but I can’t really understand your words clearly in the verses. The words in the chorus and bridge I could understand very clearly. Maybe it’s harder to make out the words in the verses because the vocal technic is stronger.
November 21, 2015