Dan Heidt

Wistful is a great word for the emotion of this song.  I love your lyric style, the rhythm of your lines is pleasant to the ear and not choppy at all.. The only thing that didn’t really work for me was the percussive nature of the accompaniment.  I was expecting a softer finger style guitar (along the lines of John Denver’s Sunshine on my Shoulders—which this sort of reminded me of, in a way).  What I liked the most about this is that it’s very believable. I can tell the words are real to you.  Thanks!

Dick Plunk

Ditto what Dan said. You should get him to do that “softer finger style guitar” for you. He is a master.

You have some great lines in here. I love “life comes in a paper wrapper” and “the gypsy and the banker’s daughter”.

Nice song.

Randall Johns

Dan, thank you… and I totally agree about the accompaniment. It isn’t even a guitar, but a synthesized guitar sound, and too upfront at that. Thank you for your encouragement and kind words. I agree this song would shine much brighter with a real acoustic guitar. Unfortunately, I don’t know a skilled acoustic guitar player, not one skilled in the style this song needs, sort of a James Taylor feel, or as you said, “Sunshine on My Shoulder.” BTW, I agree that this tune is in a way reminescent of that iconic classic. Thank you for taking time to listen, and especially for taking time to offer your thoughts.

Randall Johns

Dick, thank you for your feedback and generosity in complimenting some of my lines. I try to be fresh and avoid cliches’, but like most folks, it’s a challenge and I fall into that trap all too often. BTW, I agree Dan would be great on this. He is quite the guitartist. Think he could be talked into it???