At first, I thought “cheap” referred to the bartender. But then after reading the lyrics, I realized that you were talking about the bourbon. Cheap bourbon. that being said, maybe change that line a little bit? My suggestion get rid of the cheap bourbon and “She’s a no-limit pouring hot tater Vodou queen” because the girl is trouble, right? she’ll do it with whiskey or tequila not just bourbon. Then later you can refer to it with “She’ll jack that price and wink, then cast a velvet spell to upsell her shady-ass drink.” Just my.02
May 30, 2026
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LOL! Sounds great, and thanks for the ideas Robert. I appreciate you listening!
May 31, 2026
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In the old French Quarter,
you’ll see ya what ya see.
You’ll get whatcha’ get, but won’t get it for free.
A California tiny dancer,
now possessed French Cajun Jolie.
She was down on Bourbon.
She was down’n bound to take me.
Mahogany Fire Barmaid Vampire
She’s a cheap bourbon-pourin’ hot tater Voodoo queen.
Every man’s desire. She’ll just price it higher, then cast a flippin’ spell to up-sale her hyped-up drink.
Mahogany Fire Barmaid Vampire
She’s a money-makin’ black magic trick or treat.
Every man’s desire. She’ll pour ya liquid lies and, cast a spell on the debit card you bring.
She was down on Bourbon
She was down’n bound to take me.
When I stepped up to her,
her green eyes climbed me.
She said, “Took long enough Boy, for ya to summons the bite’n heat, …..’of lil’ ole me.
She raised a hand up to top shelf,
grabbed a grail of Faux Marie Laveau Pappy
She was down on Bourbon.
She was down’n bound to take me.
But, My mojo ain’t workin’ now oh no!
My eyes like her fais do-do poured slow.
My money’s just slitherin’ out the back door.
My bourbon soul’s taken at the crossroads!
Mahogany Fire Barmaid Vampire
She’s a cheap bourbon-pourin’ hot tater Voodoo queen.
Every man’s desire. She’ll just price it higher, then cast a flippin’ spell to up-sale her hyped-up drink.
Mahogany Fire Barmaid Vampire
She’s a money-makin’ spirit cheatin’ thief.
Every man’s desire. She’ll pour ya liquid lies and, cast a spell on the debit card you bring.
She was down on Bourbon.
She was down’n bound to take me.
Mahogany Fire.
Don’t take me down!
Don’t take me down. No, don’t ya take me down!
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At first, I thought “cheap” referred to the bartender. But then after reading the lyrics, I realized that you were talking about the bourbon. Cheap bourbon. that being said, maybe change that line a little bit? My suggestion get rid of the cheap bourbon and “She’s a no-limit pouring hot tater Vodou queen” because the girl is trouble, right? she’ll do it with whiskey or tequila not just bourbon. Then later you can refer to it with “She’ll jack that price and wink, then cast a velvet spell to upsell her shady-ass drink.” Just my.02
May 30, 2026
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LOL! Sounds great, and thanks for the ideas Robert. I appreciate you listening!
May 31, 2026
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DeeDee Beeler
Rockin, catchy, fun good song
May 29, 2026
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