All those disappointments, all those things holding you back, all those reasons not to be happy - maybe it's you. So row out to your ship of dreams, don't wait for it to find you.
Song structure, theme, instruments etc.
Good feel. Very melancholic. I agree that the pace of the song suggests and gives that floating feeling. Good job!
June 26, 2014
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nice feel to this… and a nice sentiment.. if it was me I would try and prune the song length down a bit, maybe condense the verses a little or double up some verses and remove a couple of choruses.. but thats just me, I prefer to keep it short and sweet.. 
June 26, 2014
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Ship of Dreams
Ch Go out to your ship of dreams
Time to leave the shore
Row out to your ship of dreams
Don't stand there waiting for your ship of dreams for ever more
If you have a song, A song you'd like to sing.
Just step right up and share it with the world
There's music in your dreams
And soul in every note and every word.
If there is a soul, Someone in your world
Do they know how much they mean and how you feel
Why hide behind your fear
You'll often lose a soul that's never told
If there is a place, A place within your heart
A place that brings some meaning to your world
Start making travel plans
And the journey will be just as great a part
You may find your ship of dreams, In your heart and in your soul
In your own distant horizon that's inside
Leave the fools gold
Only your ship can reach your rainbow's end.
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Nigel,
Nice job. In some ways I could see the tempo coming up, but there is something really nice about the pace you have it. The way you have the melody and the tempo it gives you that rocking feel of a ship being docked calling your name. I like the concept and think that the message is clear. Because the song is slow in its nature, I could see a need to maybe try to do something like a long solo or something halfway through or something to break of the feel of losing interest. Just my thoughts. I’d be curious on what others think. Thanks for sharing!
June 22, 2014
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Good feel. Very melancholic. I agree that the pace of the song suggests and gives that floating feeling. Good job!
June 26, 2014
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nice feel to this… and a nice sentiment.. if it was me I would try and prune the song length down a bit, maybe condense the verses a little or double up some verses and remove a couple of choruses.. but thats just me, I prefer to keep it short and sweet..
June 26, 2014
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Dennis Field
Nigel,
Nice job. In some ways I could see the tempo coming up, but there is something really nice about the pace you have it. The way you have the melody and the tempo it gives you that rocking feel of a ship being docked calling your name. I like the concept and think that the message is clear. Because the song is slow in its nature, I could see a need to maybe try to do something like a long solo or something halfway through or something to break of the feel of losing interest. Just my thoughts. I’d be curious on what others think. Thanks for sharing!
June 22, 2014