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Cute song! Very coy
Feels like it takes a little bit long to get to your hook. Editing out a few lines could help bring it up faster:
“...Only so many girls I’m not gonna kiss.
I’ll try to be good,
But only so much.”
You could even bring back “There are some temptations I can’t avoid / Men will be men, and boys will be boys…” in the very last chorus for a fresh set of lines.
Bridge also feels too long - too much space between lines and words. Chopping it right in half would help with that.
Fun tune, dude! And great demo. Thanks for sharing!
June 19, 2014
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Only So Much
by Dave Undis and Michael Skotte
VERSE
I probably shouldn’t drink another beer.
I probably shouldn’t even be here.
I probably shouldn’t be out so late.
But, damn, this party’s really going great.
I know I shouldn’t dance with you.
But what do you expect a man to do?
CHORUS
There’s only so much fun I’m gonna pass up.
Only so much beer I’m not gonna chug.
Only so many parties I’m gonna miss.
Only so many girls I’m not gonna kiss.
There are some temptations I can’t avoid.
Men will be men, and boys will be boys.
I’ll try to be good,
But only so much.
VERSE
Girl, you really got it going on.
It’s awful hard to keep my hands off.
I’m trying not to fall for you.
There’s only so much time until I do.
The Lord made me what I am.
I’m not a saint. I’m just a man.
CHORUS
There’s only so much fun I’m gonna pass up.
Only so much beer I’m not gonna chug.
Only so many parties I’m gonna miss.
Only so many girls I’m not gonna kiss.
There are some temptations I can’t avoid.
Men will be men, and boys will be boys.
I’ll try to be good,
But only so much.
BRIDGE
I like beer. I like girls. I love to play.
It ain’t my fault. It’s in my DNA.
I’ll stop myself once, and maybe again.
Maybe a third time, but then…
CHORUS
There’s only so much fun I’m gonna pass up.
Only so much beer I’m not gonna chug.
Only so many parties I’m gonna miss.
Only so many girls I’m not gonna kiss.
There are some temptations I can’t avoid.
Men will be men, and boys will be boys.
I’ll try to be good,
But only so much.
Only so much.
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Cute song! Very coy
Feels like it takes a little bit long to get to your hook. Editing out a few lines could help bring it up faster:
“...Only so many girls I’m not gonna kiss.
I’ll try to be good,
But only so much.”
You could even bring back “There are some temptations I can’t avoid / Men will be men, and boys will be boys…” in the very last chorus for a fresh set of lines.
Bridge also feels too long - too much space between lines and words. Chopping it right in half would help with that.
Fun tune, dude! And great demo. Thanks for sharing!
June 19, 2014
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Robert Markham
Good song…nice flow, nice lyrics. Thanks for sharing.
June 01, 2014
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