This song was actually inspired by a commercial. It's about giving and not expecting anything in return except to watch the joy of others.
(And sorry about the "roughness" and the little music blip at the end)
Thank you so much. You’re probably the third person to say that Billy Joel thing about this song! He was a big influence to me.
I get what you mean about the going up at certain parts. I def agree. In future recordings I should probably “indulge” more and kind of just go off the original melody.
I usually write my music and melody first, hoping that the songs will flow better because of it. I think it tends to help them not to sound forced. I have a problem the other way around.
But, thank you for your feedback, and yes, that was the commercial…. love it!!
May 09, 2014
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Charlie,
A really pretty song. I totally agree with Tonya. I think that if the chorus had a different melody from the verse, and really soared, this song would be perfect. And since it is a story with 3 fairly long verses, it needs that melodic difference to break it up a little.
The summarizing line (“fix a bird’s broken wing - etc”) is cool.
Good song.
May 14, 2014
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Ok, cool. although the chorus is a different melody than the verses, I see what you mean. Thanx!
May 20, 2014
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A Glimmer of Hope
© April 30, 2014 Charlie Katt • www.charliekatt.com
Verse 1
He steps out the door and he closes the gate
He's off to his job and he seldom is late
Never misses a meal, never misses a date
Now, he’s headed on home at five twenty-eight
He feeds an old dog and he helps an old man
Sees a penniless girl doing best that she can
So he goes in his pocket pulls out in his hand
A couple of coins with an old rubber band
And the little girl cries, and the little girl cries
Chorus
When the rains pour down and the floods rise high
Far above all wealth, and above all pride
At the end of the day we can say we've tried
To put glimmer of hope in the lost one’s eyes
Verse 2
Comes back around every chance, every day
Throws a quarter or two in the little girl’s tray
He may not get back what he gives away
But, he can't help but color what's otherwise gray
And, the little girl smiles, and the little girl smiles
(Chorus)
Verse 3
He helps the old man, and he feeds the old dog
As he raises his head sees the little girl's gone
Tears fill his eyes as he looks towards the Sun
And, he can't help but think "What more could I've done?"
Just then he heard little footsteps arrive
Wiped the tears from his face and he lowered his eyes
She used the money he gave her to buy school supplies
Fix a bird's broken wings and watch how she flies
And the little girl flies, and the little girl flies
(Chorus)
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What a great voice you have! I can hear traces of Billy Joel (think Piano Man) in some sections. 
When I first read the lyrics, I wondered if it would sound forced in a few places, but I didn’t hear that at all as I listened. I’ve seen the commercial, I think, from Thailand, right? Great inspiration.
I wanted to hear some higher notes (like you do in the very last chorus with the word ‘tried’) earlier in the song, and more at the end… I was expecting you to go up with “and the little girl flies” as well.
Great job!
May 09, 2014
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Thank you so much. You’re probably the third person to say that Billy Joel thing about this song! He was a big influence to me.
I get what you mean about the going up at certain parts. I def agree. In future recordings I should probably “indulge” more and kind of just go off the original melody.
I usually write my music and melody first, hoping that the songs will flow better because of it. I think it tends to help them not to sound forced. I have a problem the other way around.
But, thank you for your feedback, and yes, that was the commercial…. love it!!
May 09, 2014
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Charlie,
A really pretty song. I totally agree with Tonya. I think that if the chorus had a different melody from the verse, and really soared, this song would be perfect. And since it is a story with 3 fairly long verses, it needs that melodic difference to break it up a little.
The summarizing line (“fix a bird’s broken wing - etc”) is cool.
Good song.
May 14, 2014
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Ok, cool. although the chorus is a different melody than the verses, I see what you mean. Thanx!
May 20, 2014
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Tonya Tyner
What a great voice you have! I can hear traces of Billy Joel (think Piano Man) in some sections.
When I first read the lyrics, I wondered if it would sound forced in a few places, but I didn’t hear that at all as I listened. I’ve seen the commercial, I think, from Thailand, right? Great inspiration.
I wanted to hear some higher notes (like you do in the very last chorus with the word ‘tried’) earlier in the song, and more at the end… I was expecting you to go up with “and the little girl flies” as well.
Great job!
May 09, 2014