Hey,
Thanks for sharing.
I am sitting in a coffee shop doing some writing of my own and I got lost in this song as soon as I hit play.
March 24, 2014
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Transatlantic
D, Bm, G, D m
The ocean occupies
The space between our bodies,
A million miles of water
In three feet
Our scents have washed together
Through the water and the weather
But we will surely drown
If we don't leave (A)
D, F#m, G, D
Kiss me
I want your breath upon my cheek
I want the space between our to retreat
I want late night fights and slammin' doors
Words that shake me to the core
Because you are (Gm) transatlantic
D, A (2nd inv), C, G
D, Bm, G, D
Slowly sinking bodies
And a million miles of water
The tide will wash us up
And leave us beached
Sand will sink into our bones
And leave us there to rot alone
Was this what we signed up for?
To steal and lie and cheat
D, F#m, G
Leave me alone, stay the night
Hold me in your arms against the cold, hard light
I want this, I do
(D, F#m) But can you feel this?
This gaping ocean, too?
D, F#m, G, D
Kiss me
I want your breath upon my cheek
I want the space between our bodies to retreat
I want late night fights and slammin' doors
Words that shake me to the core
Because you are (Gm) transatlantic
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I love your voice in this one - so calming.
Two things:
First, I think you could really throw power into this one between your second and third verse by adding a bridge with some alternate instruments jumping in here (increased dynamics on the piano with an alternate progression/maybe even a string section) and then leave the 3rd verse as-is where it brings to a quiet, hushed ending.
Second, you’re gonna hate this one: the title (and last word of the verse) could be altered for a stronger punch. Looking through some possible alternatives - words as simple as “gone” or “away” may seem cliché but I think they’d work great here and allow the lyrics to match the song’s feel.
I can definitely listen to this on repeat though, so thanks!
March 10, 2014
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Hey,
Thanks for sharing.
I am sitting in a coffee shop doing some writing of my own and I got lost in this song as soon as I hit play.
March 24, 2014
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Adam Tock
I love your voice in this one - so calming.
Two things:
First, I think you could really throw power into this one between your second and third verse by adding a bridge with some alternate instruments jumping in here (increased dynamics on the piano with an alternate progression/maybe even a string section) and then leave the 3rd verse as-is where it brings to a quiet, hushed ending.
Second, you’re gonna hate this one: the title (and last word of the verse) could be altered for a stronger punch. Looking through some possible alternatives - words as simple as “gone” or “away” may seem cliché but I think they’d work great here and allow the lyrics to match the song’s feel.
I can definitely listen to this on repeat though, so thanks!
March 10, 2014
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