I recently read an article about growing up and living in the Oklahoma Dust Bowl of the 1930s. This is demo of what I hope to enhance. Its the basic tune, guitar and vocals.
Storytelling. Does it capture a sense of living in the dust bowl. Does the music match the lyrics.
Does have a lonesome, 30’s sound of living in a land of despair. Good use of minor chords. Nice!!!
February 27, 2014
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Greg,
This does have a “dusty” feel to it. I think you could push it a bit more even. Maybe adjust the tempo a bit. If this helps at all..
I remember one time in Arizona I was listening to someone play the song “Ghost Riders in the Sky” and it was on a dusty road the guitarist was weathered and had dusty boots on. I remember this visual very clearly because it was the perfect example in my mind of that song being played in it’s simplest setting and it felt gritty. I’m curious if maybe you can look to that song for some inspiration.
Maybe you could also give me more of that essence of wind in a dust bowl. Maybe you can add some background vocals or a break where you hum or something.
I may not be super clear with my feedback, but I hope it helps. Keep working on this.
Dennis
February 24, 2014
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Does have a lonesome, 30’s sound of living in a land of despair. Good use of minor chords. Nice!!!
February 27, 2014
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Dennis Field
Greg,
This does have a “dusty” feel to it. I think you could push it a bit more even. Maybe adjust the tempo a bit. If this helps at all..
I remember one time in Arizona I was listening to someone play the song “Ghost Riders in the Sky” and it was on a dusty road the guitarist was weathered and had dusty boots on. I remember this visual very clearly because it was the perfect example in my mind of that song being played in it’s simplest setting and it felt gritty. I’m curious if maybe you can look to that song for some inspiration.
Maybe you could also give me more of that essence of wind in a dust bowl. Maybe you can add some background vocals or a break where you hum or something.
I may not be super clear with my feedback, but I hope it helps. Keep working on this.
Dennis
February 24, 2014
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