i don't love the melody in the verses ("it's hard to know but...")
Emma,
I completely agree with the above comment. The tone in your voice is captivating. It’s hard for me to really figure out what exactly this song is about. Some of the lyrics seem connected, others just seem like clever phrases thrown in without any real connection, but I’m not sure I would even change that. I like the emotion you portray through your voice and unless you’re going for a solid story line, I wouldn’t change a thing.
Great song! I look forward to hearing more of your music.
Lach
February 23, 2014
Wow. This really shows off your vocals nicely. I’d like to see how you can refine this some to make it a bit clearer because I do like how this song feels, but like Lachelle said, I’m a tad unsure what I’m suppose to get from the song from a story point of view.
February 24, 2014
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Thank you for your comments! I was kind of inspired by one of my favorite songwriters, Matt Berninger, who says that he writes ‘feelings’ instead of ‘stories’. So I wanted to give that approach a shot!
February 24, 2014
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Yeah, I think sometimes that approach to a song can work in the sense that it sounds awesome melodically, but it tends to make the song unrelatable. However, I love what you did. I keep coming back to listen to this song and it’s been stuck in my head for days. You’ve got me hooked! I’m bad at picking out chords by ear but I’d love to know which ones you’re using if you’re willing to share!
February 25, 2014
Great voice,,,pulls the listener in. I to am having a little trouble with the lyrics although it is my interpretation that you’e having trouble leaving this particular person and there is a pull that won’t allow you to. Good song and melody.
February 28, 2014
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Sometimes we just have to go with a bit of mystery. Why must everything be black and white. I like thinking about what it means if someone is a cult. I like the space you leave for me to do that. I like that I am not getting hit over the head with meaning.
ANd again the music is great. Thanks so much for sharing.
April 11, 2018
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It’s hard to know but I think I’m told
Yesterday is a small room
You’re just like me in different shoes
I shouldn’t hold on to you
With my back to you
I feel alright
You’re a cult
You’re a preacher
I’m a liar
A believer
You’re getting older, I’m feeling better
At pushing you around
But I’ll burn that bridge when I get to it
I’m always falling down
With my back to you
I feel alright
You’re a cult
And you’re eager
I’m a fraud
Getting weaker
Ooh
I’m falling back on you
It’s not alright
You’re a cult
A reliever
I’m on fire
With a fever
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Beautiful song, Emma! The tone of your voice is so deep and amazing. I loved the harmony parts throughout.
February 22, 2014
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Emma,
I completely agree with the above comment. The tone in your voice is captivating. It’s hard for me to really figure out what exactly this song is about. Some of the lyrics seem connected, others just seem like clever phrases thrown in without any real connection, but I’m not sure I would even change that. I like the emotion you portray through your voice and unless you’re going for a solid story line, I wouldn’t change a thing.
Great song! I look forward to hearing more of your music.
Lach
February 23, 2014
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Wow. This really shows off your vocals nicely. I’d like to see how you can refine this some to make it a bit clearer because I do like how this song feels, but like Lachelle said, I’m a tad unsure what I’m suppose to get from the song from a story point of view.
February 24, 2014
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Thank you for your comments! I was kind of inspired by one of my favorite songwriters, Matt Berninger, who says that he writes ‘feelings’ instead of ‘stories’. So I wanted to give that approach a shot!
February 24, 2014
1
Yeah, I think sometimes that approach to a song can work in the sense that it sounds awesome melodically, but it tends to make the song unrelatable. However, I love what you did. I keep coming back to listen to this song and it’s been stuck in my head for days. You’ve got me hooked! I’m bad at picking out chords by ear but I’d love to know which ones you’re using if you’re willing to share!
February 25, 2014
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No problem!
G Em Am C
and then it’s a B7 at the end of each section 
February 25, 2014
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Great voice,,,pulls the listener in. I to am having a little trouble with the lyrics although it is my interpretation that you’e having trouble leaving this particular person and there is a pull that won’t allow you to. Good song and melody.
February 28, 2014
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Sometimes we just have to go with a bit of mystery. Why must everything be black and white. I like thinking about what it means if someone is a cult. I like the space you leave for me to do that. I like that I am not getting hit over the head with meaning.
ANd again the music is great. Thanks so much for sharing.
April 11, 2018
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Anthony C. Reitzel
Beautiful song, Emma! The tone of your voice is so deep and amazing. I loved the harmony parts throughout.
February 22, 2014
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