Dennis Field

Nice job! I can see the female vocals peeking in on this like you mentioned above. Your other changes are valid as well.

Great use of “What if..” Also very catchy melody.

Thanks for sharing!

Dick Plunk

Phillippe - I really, really like this. I think it is an interesting lyric and a really cool relaxing melody and groove. Nice harmonies throughout. The only suggestion I have is that I think you could add a neat guitar solo over the “oohs” in your musical interlude (just before the bridge). It could be based on the chorus melody, but not quite the exact melody. Great song….....

Philippe Clément

Thanks again for your feedback, I’m glad to hear you like the song That’s a nice idea and it’s exactly why I posted this song on here.

I’ll try to find something and keep you posted on the changes! Btw, do you think some extra string instruments and light drums or shaker would add to it?

-Phil

Mary Segato

Really nice song Phill !  I can hear this song sticking with a natural acoustic sound. I really liked the line “I’ll try to make the wrong things right” and the fact that you got stronger there, maybe adding some other instrument as you build. Nice flow to this song and I really like your voice.

Philippe Clément

Thanks for the feedback Mary!

Lachelle Chaney

I can definitely see you adding a shaker, especially near the end, after that build-up! Nice song. I like the chorus a lot.

JT Hillier

Phil,

Great tune man, probably the best I’ve heard on Frettie so far.

Based on this recording, I think your biggest strength is your general sense for song structure, both from a writing standpoint and also from a production standpoint. Just to focus on the production, you really used all of your separate / multilayered tracks well on this song (ie lead guitar tag in the intro, second / third guitar melodies, choice of overdubbing / harmonies etc) from a placement perspective, you seem to know when and where to bring them in and leave them out etc (more sparse and simplistic early, progressively more intricate throughout). It’s a pretty simple and subtle thing really but it’s just so damn necessary (that a lot of listeners don’t even notice consciously) but from this perspective it’s subtly well crafted and kept this understated song from losing steam. 

My only major critique would be the general lengthiness of the song, I believe it’s over five and a half minutes and would argue it should be at least a minute shorter. I think that something, somewhere needs to be cut, shortened or swapped (particularly in the second half of the song after the musical interlude.) I could also hear the ending tag of just repeating “settle down” in the lead vocal a few more times and a little earlier in the song.

I also enjoyed the general tone of this song and the preservation of it’s organic / intimate qualities productionally (keeping guitar string squeaks, room noises etc) and the intimacy in the tone of your playing/voice sounds really great man.

Andddd those are my thoughts. Great job man, you have a really great sound and ability for writing, performing and producing. I look forward to hearing more of your stuff soon! Rock on

JTH

Philippe Clément

Wow. Thanks for the very generous and constructive feedback.

I totally agree with you about the length of the song and it something I should be correcting in studio soon.

Again, thank you, thank you, thank you! It means alot to me