True break up song
Is this too sad/sappy?
Wow, thanks Jayne! Those are my co-writers singing on the home studio demo. I’m sure we can fix us that with either a re-sing or a lyric change to make it clearer. I really appreciate your feedback, Thanks for listening.
October 21, 2021
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Run Out
Aidan Johnson-Bujold, Mike Ure, & Doug Folkins 2021 ©
Been working on this bottle
Thank God I got another
‘Cause it’s about to run out
Been sitting by this fire
Just stacking pallets higher
Watch ‘em burn on down
It’s like my life broke down on the side of the road
I’ve run outta gas, run outta luck
Run out of sad songs thinking about us
Run outta cigarettes, Marlboro reds
Wishing that we never fell in love
Run out patience, run out reasons, run outta sleep
Guess you aint the only thing that’s run out on me
It’s been twenty one days
Since you went away
I guess tears have dried out
You changed your profile picture
To one without me with ya
Guess the word’s out now
And I’m out here breaking down on the side of the road
Chorus
I didn’t think that you were you kind
To leave me behind when the going got tough
Who would've thought everything we had
Was never gonna be enough
I’ve run outta gas, run outta luck
Run out of sad songs thinking about us
Run outta cigarettes, Marlboro reds
Wishing that we never fell in love
Run out patience, run out reasons, run outta sleep
Run out of stupid, sorry excuses I’ll never believe
Guess you aint the only thing that’s run out on me
Guess you aint the only thing that’s run out on me
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Hey Doug! Great song!! Love the title and everything that supports it in the chorus! I really dig your set up too…
“I guess you ain’t the only thing that’s run out on me”. Really cool! I know since it’s demo’d, I’m sure you won’t go back in.. but the set up into the hook is a tad bit hard to understand unless reading the lyric. I had to recheck it against lyric. That’s my only feedback. I DIG!!!
October 20, 2021
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Wow, thanks Jayne! Those are my co-writers singing on the home studio demo. I’m sure we can fix us that with either a re-sing or a lyric change to make it clearer. I really appreciate your feedback, Thanks for listening.
October 21, 2021
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Jayne Sachs
Hey Doug! Great song!! Love the title and everything that supports it in the chorus! I really dig your set up too…
“I guess you ain’t the only thing that’s run out on me”. Really cool! I know since it’s demo’d, I’m sure you won’t go back in.. but the set up into the hook is a tad bit hard to understand unless reading the lyric. I had to recheck it against lyric. That’s my only feedback. I DIG!!!
October 20, 2021
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