Hey Jackson!
I do indeed like your 2 cents! Appreciate it… the title is a very good one… that i can change without much hassle. I would love to get the mix/balance up but alas, it was a stereo mix from sometime ago from a studio that is no longer in biz… but i do know the guitarist who layed it down, perhaps he has some suggestions or he may even have the .wav files from the recording years ago. i just recently re-wrote it and had it re-sung. well thanks for the feedback… now i’lll scoot over to your place and take a listen! 
June 15, 2021
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Hi Richard, to build on Jackson’s comments, great blues scorcher. Regarding the title, I would consider “Even though you’re leaving me today.” “Your leaving me today “alone makes me feel like I already know the end of the story. “Even though” adds mystery. Great work overall. -Pete
June 16, 2021
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i won’t forget you
baby i can’t believe, you wanna leave my life
you’re telling me good bye, how was i to know
so much a part of me for all these years
i can’t replace your love if you go
but i won’t forget you
not one moment will fade away
you’ll never leave my heart sweet darling
even though you’re leaving me today
and you say you’re leaving me today
baby you know how much i love you
i thought our love was forever strong
i’ve been so blessed to share my dreams with you
i’m truly sorry if i ever did you wrong
chorus
if you ever change your mind,
i’ll find the time to be a friend if you ever need me again
break
but i can’t forget you
your sweet love won’t fade away
you’ll always be in my heart sweet darling
even though you’re leaving me today
and you say you’re leaving me today
©richard murrey, b.m.i.
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Hey Richard,
I usually don’t like folks who post after me and deprive others of an opportunity to hear my ‘masterpiece’, but, boy, you have a scorcher blues number here, and I love the blues!
Two things I would suggest to make it hit even harder: get the lead guitar further up front, if you will, a bit dirtier (at the end of the day it’s not your lyric, it’s the feel, and the lead connects directly to it ), and the title, I think “You’re Leaving Me Today,” really works better in the blues idiom: “I Won’t Forget You” is just too positive for a break-up song. My 2 cents. Be well, Jack.
June 15, 2021
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Hey Jackson!
I do indeed like your 2 cents! Appreciate it… the title is a very good one… that i can change without much hassle. I would love to get the mix/balance up but alas, it was a stereo mix from sometime ago from a studio that is no longer in biz… but i do know the guitarist who layed it down, perhaps he has some suggestions or he may even have the .wav files from the recording years ago. i just recently re-wrote it and had it re-sung. well thanks for the feedback… now i’lll scoot over to your place and take a listen!
June 15, 2021
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Hi Richard, to build on Jackson’s comments, great blues scorcher. Regarding the title, I would consider “Even though you’re leaving me today.” “Your leaving me today “alone makes me feel like I already know the end of the story. “Even though” adds mystery. Great work overall. -Pete
June 16, 2021
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Hey Richard,
I usually don’t like folks who post after me and deprive others of an opportunity to hear my ‘masterpiece’, but, boy, you have a scorcher blues number here, and I love the blues!
Two things I would suggest to make it hit even harder: get the lead guitar further up front, if you will, a bit dirtier (at the end of the day it’s not your lyric, it’s the feel, and the lead connects directly to it ), and the title, I think “You’re Leaving Me Today,” really works better in the blues idiom: “I Won’t Forget You” is just too positive for a break-up song. My 2 cents. Be well, Jack.
June 15, 2021
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