This song is about two people that were unwanted by all others until they found eachother
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UGLY BABY
VS:
I was just an ugly baby --- And no one ever loved me
What I lacked in confidence see --- Yeah, I made up, made up in stupidity
Pre-CH:
So, I grew --- And I learned --- And I found
CH:
You are the apple of my eye --- And you are just my kind
You are the sun in my sky --- Baby, you are my good time
VS:
She was just an ugly baby --- But she found love in me
What she lacked in monetary means --- She made up, made up in beauty
Pre-CH:
So, she grew --- And she learned --- And she found
CH:
Solo over VS
Pre-CH:
CH:
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Thanks for the feedback on my tune! Thought I’d return the favor, for what it’s worth:
1. I was just an ugly baby sounds kind of self-pitying to my ears. I wanted to hear instead something like “They called me an ugly baby” and “They said no one would ever love me”. This sets up a story of overcoming the odds, in my opinion, instead of the singer accepting the idea that they are ugly or stupid. So, having catalysts who create the problem for the song’s hero, I guess.
2. For the Pre-chorus, I would like to hear you finish the thought of what you found. So, the question is what did you find? I think it might be obvious to you that the chorus says that, but what if the pre-chorus said something like “So I grew, and I learned, and I found (You… or someone who could love me) Then, that leads into the chorus more cleanly, I think.
Apply the same logic to the verses about her, just change the words a little to fit. Then, that way, it’s more of an underdog story about two people who didn’t accept what other people said or thought about them!
Just my two cents, hope it helps somehow. Either way, cheers and keep writing!
March 30, 2021
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Al Raebuck
Thanks for the feedback on my tune! Thought I’d return the favor, for what it’s worth:
1. I was just an ugly baby sounds kind of self-pitying to my ears. I wanted to hear instead something like “They called me an ugly baby” and “They said no one would ever love me”. This sets up a story of overcoming the odds, in my opinion, instead of the singer accepting the idea that they are ugly or stupid. So, having catalysts who create the problem for the song’s hero, I guess.
2. For the Pre-chorus, I would like to hear you finish the thought of what you found. So, the question is what did you find? I think it might be obvious to you that the chorus says that, but what if the pre-chorus said something like “So I grew, and I learned, and I found (You… or someone who could love me) Then, that leads into the chorus more cleanly, I think.
Apply the same logic to the verses about her, just change the words a little to fit. Then, that way, it’s more of an underdog story about two people who didn’t accept what other people said or thought about them!
Just my two cents, hope it helps somehow. Either way, cheers and keep writing!
March 30, 2021
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