I wrote this song shortly after joining NSAI in 2001. I remember the instructor saying to, "Try to paint a picture with your lyric." I recently came across this song in my files and, although I know the song doesn't fit the mold of today's current style, it still took me back to "Many Years Ago"
Thank you Sundi Jo Graham, for taking the time to share your thoughts & insight, in addition to taking time to listen to my song. I agree with you, that the intro is too long. I noticed that as I brushed it off to share after putting it aside for more than 15 years. As for the crux of the story, I grew up in a very small town, much like what you described in Missouri. I now live in Tampa, FL, but the life I lived with my friends of “Many Years Ago,” were/are the best!
August 07, 2020
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With every breath we’d take,
There was no mistake,
Citrus season was here again,
Cause that smell that spewed,
From that citrus plant ooze,
Was like nowhere else,
We’d ever been.
There were fruit stand venders
Along the road,
On the edge of town, all in a row,
And the trucks would roll by
With their heavy loads,
As we pumped our arms,
To hear their horns blow.
We’d leave for school
With our shoes on,
But just before we’d meet,
We’d take’m off and roll up our cuffs,
Cause tough kids
Went to school with bare feet.
And now it seems
It was more like a dream,
But I’m so glad I know,
I’ve got a good friend,
To talk about when,
It was many years ago.
No one I knew,
Had much money to spend,
Most of us lived on red clay roads.
But, no amount of money,
Could buy best of friends;
Friends from many years ago.
We’d be Ricky Nelson,
With our air-guitars,
In the mirror,
Try’n to look cool.
And we’d flip up our collars
Like rock’n-roll stars,
Singing, “Ooh-ooh, Poor Little Fool.”
And on 4th of July,
The whole town would meet,
Down by the lake,
The sky would light up,
And the earth would shake,
As we talked about,
Girls we’d like to date,
And now it seems
It was more like a dream,
But I’m so glad I know,
I’ve got a good friend,
To talk about when,
It was many years ago.
Yeah, it was many years,
So many years, many years ago.
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Jack, great start to a great song. Love the melody. A couple things:
1) Perhaps shorten the intro. I was eager for the first line to start, then I heard more guitar.
2) The song is deep and definitely tells a story, but I got kinda confused in what exactly it is you were wanting to portray.
3) Great pitch change into the chorus.
Hope these thoughts are helpful.
August 07, 2020
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Thank you Sundi Jo Graham, for taking the time to share your thoughts & insight, in addition to taking time to listen to my song. I agree with you, that the intro is too long. I noticed that as I brushed it off to share after putting it aside for more than 15 years. As for the crux of the story, I grew up in a very small town, much like what you described in Missouri. I now live in Tampa, FL, but the life I lived with my friends of “Many Years Ago,” were/are the best!
August 07, 2020
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Sundi Jo Graham
Jack, great start to a great song. Love the melody. A couple things:
1) Perhaps shorten the intro. I was eager for the first line to start, then I heard more guitar.
2) The song is deep and definitely tells a story, but I got kinda confused in what exactly it is you were wanting to portray.
3) Great pitch change into the chorus.
Hope these thoughts are helpful.
August 07, 2020
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