Trying to hold on to a relationship that is falling apart...Produced by Pearl Snap Studios, Nashville.
Hi Alexsi
This is a really nice smooth sounding song. Your demo guy did a great job. Lots of good pics in your lyrics and enjoyed listening. Good job!!
February 11, 2020
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Thank you for your feedback! This is extremely helpful for me going forward. Keep creating! Alexsi
October 25, 2020
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Smoke ‘n Mirrors
V1
I’m suffocating, a heart starts to doubt, I can’t put this fire out
No matter how much it hurts, I still want it to burn
There’s no escaping, I took a dangerous line
What if I can’t find a way, back to you this time…
Babe, who we foolin’, keepin’ up the illusion…
Love like glass, is bound to crack…
Chorus
Smoke ‘n mirrors, it’s not what meets the eye
It’s a shattered heart, half empty, lover’s lonely night
Pick up the pieces, from the ashes, nothin’ fits quite the same
I still see you, I still see me, but our reflection’s changed
Crystal clear…we are broken, we are smoke ‘n…mirrors
V2
We’re in denial, this tight grip on us, dancin’ flames turn to dust
If you don’t let me breathe, you’ll lose me completely
You always loved me, more than I could love you back
Maybe that was just too much, for a heart to ask…
Babe, who we foolin’, keepin’ up the illusion…
Love like glass, is bound to crack…
Chorus
Smoke ‘n mirrors, it’s not what meets the eye
It’s a shattered heart, half empty, lover’s lonely night
Pick up the pieces, from the ashes, nothin’ fits quite the same
I still see you, I still see me, but our reflection’s changed
Crystal clear…we are broken, we are smoke ‘n…mirrors
Bridge
We send the world a picture
Two shades lighter than the truth that hides
Behind these doors, between these sheets
There’s the love we lost, ‘n the secrets we keep, go up in…
Chorus
Smoke ‘n mirrors, it’s not what meets the eye
It’s a shattered heart, half empty, lover’s lonely night
Pick up the pieces, from the ashes, nothin’ fits quite the same
I still see you, I still see me, but our reflection’s changed
Crystal clear…we are broken, baby, we are broken…
We are smoke ‘n…mirrors
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Great song. Beautiful melody. Great sounding demo. Really song.
In reading through the lyrics (without music), I couple of things caught my attention. Really nice references to smoke and fire, and mirror and glass. “There’s no escaping, I took a dangerous line/What if I can’t find a way, back to you this time” makes me really want to know what that “dangerous line” was. It would be cool if those two lines somehow related to the trickery of smoke and mirrors. On the “flames turn to dust”, don’t flames turn more to ashes than dust? Just a thought. I don’t have a good rhyme to go with ashes on that line.
Back to the positive stuff. Love that “let me breath/completely” rhyme in V2. I also really like that “We send the world a picture/
Two shades lighter than the truth that hides” image. That’s really original. You know, it make me think about how, when people take selfies, they have to add a bunch of filters to make the pic look better before they post it or send it. Maybe you could work that into that second line somehow, as if the world doesn’t see the real truth when you send it, because you have to filter it to hide the truth.
Anyway, great job. Great song.
February 07, 2020
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Hi Alexsi
This is a really nice smooth sounding song. Your demo guy did a great job. Lots of good pics in your lyrics and enjoyed listening. Good job!!
February 11, 2020
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Thank you for your feedback! This is extremely helpful for me going forward. Keep creating! Alexsi
October 25, 2020
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Rick Lane
Great song. Beautiful melody. Great sounding demo. Really song.
In reading through the lyrics (without music), I couple of things caught my attention. Really nice references to smoke and fire, and mirror and glass. “There’s no escaping, I took a dangerous line/What if I can’t find a way, back to you this time” makes me really want to know what that “dangerous line” was. It would be cool if those two lines somehow related to the trickery of smoke and mirrors. On the “flames turn to dust”, don’t flames turn more to ashes than dust? Just a thought. I don’t have a good rhyme to go with ashes on that line.
Back to the positive stuff. Love that “let me breath/completely” rhyme in V2. I also really like that “We send the world a picture/
Two shades lighter than the truth that hides” image. That’s really original. You know, it make me think about how, when people take selfies, they have to add a bunch of filters to make the pic look better before they post it or send it. Maybe you could work that into that second line somehow, as if the world doesn’t see the real truth when you send it, because you have to filter it to hide the truth.
Anyway, great job. Great song.
February 07, 2020
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