I'm a rare breed
born and raised on the coast
I've know the magic
the ocean can do to your soul
it can make you think you're in love for a night or two
or jump off the roof
into the swimming pool
i love to sit
and watch the people walk by
it's crazy on parade
I can't believe my eyes
that guy's a frog man
that girls in a thong
that guy's a girl, that girls a guy
what the hell's goin on
The sun goes up, the moon goes down
everything's a little bit turned around
Get a Brazilian wax, wear your chains and tats
anything goes
In a beach town
Hear the smell drums
at the bar down the street
the reggae band
with that syncopated beat
right next door
you can hear the slack string tunes
straight up Ohuau
man it's so damn cool
Chorus:
Bridge:
Get your tan on
Let your hair down
It's your va-ca
in a Beach Town
Chorus;
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Hey, Keith! Thanks for sharing your song with us. I dig your overall idea. I don’t know if you’re aiming for this to be something another artist could record or not, but if it is…
I’d consider changing the part about “I’m the rare breed born and raised on the coast.” It makes it so specific, and most artists AREN’T that person. I wonder if you can just remove the 1st verse and start with the 2nd verse. That way, the singer is just commenting on beach towns. Opens it up way more.
Of course, if that’s not your goal… do whatever you want. It’s not bad by any means to start off like you do. It just limits who might sing it.
I like the vibe. Feel like I’ve heard it a bunch, though. Would be nice to have a few melodic surprises.
Overall, nice song. I hope this helps!
July 09, 2019
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Hey, Keith! Thanks for sharing your song with us. I dig your overall idea. I don’t know if you’re aiming for this to be something another artist could record or not, but if it is…
I’d consider changing the part about “I’m the rare breed born and raised on the coast.” It makes it so specific, and most artists AREN’T that person. I wonder if you can just remove the 1st verse and start with the 2nd verse. That way, the singer is just commenting on beach towns. Opens it up way more.
Of course, if that’s not your goal… do whatever you want. It’s not bad by any means to start off like you do. It just limits who might sing it.
I like the vibe. Feel like I’ve heard it a bunch, though. Would be nice to have a few melodic surprises.
Overall, nice song. I hope this helps!
July 09, 2019
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