What Now?
Keith Vincent
when our words
cut like knives
and the hurt
streams from our eyes
when the room grows so quiet
all we can hear is that voice
in our heads
saying…
maybe I will
maybe i won’t
what if i do
and it’s not what I want
it’s damned if we do
and damned if we don’t and
all that’s left to be said is…….
what now?
what are we gonna do
are we gonna walk away
or see it thru
what now?
when the simple truth is
we’ve done everything
we can do
what now?
i can feel it down
deep in my soul
the last thing I want
is to see you go
if we have a future
things have to change
i know, i know
but what now?
what are we gonna do
are we gonna walk away
or see it thru
what now?
when the simple truth is
we’ve done everything
we can do
what now?
your tearin me up
I’m wearing you down
if both of us are sad and confused
what now?
what are we gonna do
are we gonna walk away
or see it thru
what now?
when the simple truth is
we’ve done everything
we can do
what now?
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Hey, Keith! Thanks for sharing your song! I dig the emotion in the song. I’m glad you have the singer wanting the girl to stay- puts him in a more positive light. I wonder if it would be a little tighter if you have him wanting her to stay the whole song, but he’s not sure if she’s going to. Kind of “I’ve laid it on the line for you. What now? Are YOU going to stay or go? It’s up to you if my heart breaks or not. So what now?”
Just a thought. Overall, I like it. Nice work!
October 14, 2017
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Brent Baxter
Hey, Keith! Thanks for sharing your song! I dig the emotion in the song. I’m glad you have the singer wanting the girl to stay- puts him in a more positive light. I wonder if it would be a little tighter if you have him wanting her to stay the whole song, but he’s not sure if she’s going to. Kind of “I’ve laid it on the line for you. What now? Are YOU going to stay or go? It’s up to you if my heart breaks or not. So what now?”
Just a thought. Overall, I like it. Nice work!
October 14, 2017
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