This song has never been recorded as acoustic bluegrass, but I love it.
Hey, Marvin- thanks for sharing!
Some good stuff here. I like the thought of the 1st 2 verses, but the 3rd verse raises more questions than it answers. Is the boy dying outside? Why? I’m too busy THINKING about that to FEEL the emotion of the verse.
Other than that, I’d be careful about how many times you say the word “rain” outside of your title. It can diminish the impact of the word.
For example, the 1st line could be “she’s standing in the storm, but she don’t care.” And I wonder if the 2nd line could be “it hides the teardrops on her face.” Just a thought. Because while her heart is in another place, that other place is only a few feet away, with her son as he gets on the bus. So that throws me- makes me think her heart is far off, but it’s really not.
Just a few thoughts. Good work as always. Hope it helps!
July 09, 2019
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She’s standin’ in the rain, but she don’t care
Because her heart’s another place
She’s watchin’ as her son gets on that bus
She won’t leave till she knows he’s safe
Unless you live to feel it, words just won’t explain
Unselfish love, she don’t feel the rain
He’s standin’ on a corner and it’s pourin’
His sign held high for all to see
It says I’m lookin’ for a job cause the one I lost
Wasn’t much but fed my family
Unless you live to feel it, words just won’t explain
Unselfish love, he don’t feel the rain
Rain falls in
Life and then
Love heals pain
And shields the rain
He takes His final breath and bows His head
His work on earth is finally done
With the last beat of his heart the sky grows dark
Another mother holds her son
Unless you live to feel it, words just won’t explain
Unselfish love, they don’t feel the rain
Once you live to feel it, life won’t be the same
With unselfish love, you don’t feel the rain
You don’t feel the rain
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Over 6000 views 1 like I don’t get it. Great song.
Great message. Kinda reminds a little bit of John Denver
Keep it up
July 03, 2019
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Hey, Marvin- thanks for sharing!
Some good stuff here. I like the thought of the 1st 2 verses, but the 3rd verse raises more questions than it answers. Is the boy dying outside? Why? I’m too busy THINKING about that to FEEL the emotion of the verse.
Other than that, I’d be careful about how many times you say the word “rain” outside of your title. It can diminish the impact of the word.
For example, the 1st line could be “she’s standing in the storm, but she don’t care.” And I wonder if the 2nd line could be “it hides the teardrops on her face.” Just a thought. Because while her heart is in another place, that other place is only a few feet away, with her son as he gets on the bus. So that throws me- makes me think her heart is far off, but it’s really not.
Just a few thoughts. Good work as always. Hope it helps!
July 09, 2019
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Over 6000 views 1 like I don’t get it. Great song.
Great message. Kinda reminds a little bit of John Denver
Keep it up
July 03, 2019
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