I know I screw up the chords half way through but is the structure solid ??
Sometimes I think the second verse is too long but then again, I don't know if it's pretty enough to let you look the other way. thoughts ?
great guitar playing and vocals again on a good song! Good structure (IMHO) but if you wanted to arrange it for a band - I hear a walking upright bass on this too - throughout the verses but also mimicking the notes on the “I don’t know” part. the bass could also duplicate the guitar figure that occurs before it returns to the verse - and it might be cool to have a bowed upright sounding long slow notes on the verses after the first “I don’t know” too (maybe) and maybe the bass doing low harmonizing on the second iteration of the “I don’t know” part - and maybe a simple tambourine percussion playing throughout (shaken not slapped 
. But I tend to overload music with too many unnecessary items - it’s a good tune as is!
November 21, 2013
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I enjoyed this. The second verse to me didn’t feel long to me. Or I guess it didn’t distract me from the rest of the song. The I don’t know… part where it gets lower, feels a bit abrupt to me. LIke your other songs the guitar fits the tone nicely. Hope this helps!
October 08, 2013
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great guitar playing and vocals again on a good song! Good structure (IMHO) but if you wanted to arrange it for a band - I hear a walking upright bass on this too - throughout the verses but also mimicking the notes on the “I don’t know” part. the bass could also duplicate the guitar figure that occurs before it returns to the verse - and it might be cool to have a bowed upright sounding long slow notes on the verses after the first “I don’t know” too (maybe) and maybe the bass doing low harmonizing on the second iteration of the “I don’t know” part - and maybe a simple tambourine percussion playing throughout (shaken not slapped . But I tend to overload music with too many unnecessary items - it’s a good tune as is!
November 21, 2013
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Dennis Field
I enjoyed this. The second verse to me didn’t feel long to me. Or I guess it didn’t distract me from the rest of the song. The I don’t know… part where it gets lower, feels a bit abrupt to me. LIke your other songs the guitar fits the tone nicely. Hope this helps!
October 08, 2013
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