This is song about that feeling you get when you know something isn't quite right with a relationship. There aren't any obvious signs, you just have a feeling that something bad is about to happen.
A BUNCH of nice things about this one—song (lyrically and musically) is very solid—vocals good and solid, band plays well—in other words, I REALLY liked this song.
SMALL quibbles: 1) engineer not always keeping vocals at exactly the right level (with respect to levels for rest of the band parts), and 2) maybe add 1 more measure before the chorus and before the bridge, then really work on building energy into both of those sections.
I DO think this one is first-rate, and probably ready to be shopped around (the small negatives I mentioned are not really major problems at all).
Best wishes in all your songwriting/musical endeavors!!!
November 01, 2018
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Verse 1:
Red dawn on the horizon
Im' takin heed the warnin' signs
cause my old bones they tell a story
that today ain't gonna be blue sky
Here comes the rain
Verse 2:
lately everything is sunshine
ain't no fightin' ain't no lies
but I can't shake this gloomy feeling
that it's just a matter of time
Here comes the rain
Chorus:
In the distance the skies are dark
I can feel a storm a brewin' in my heart
the air is heavy like something has change
in your arms I suddenly feel strange
Oh, Here comes the rain
Verse 3:
Girl, you've been on good behavior
kept all the promises you've made
and I got no reason not to trust you
as far as I know anyway
Bridge:
Clouds are formin' winds are risin' hot and cold they collide
clouds are formin' winds are risin' hot and cold they collide
clouds are formin' winds are risin' hot and cold they collide
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A BUNCH of nice things about this one—song (lyrically and musically) is very solid—vocals good and solid, band plays well—in other words, I REALLY liked this song.
SMALL quibbles: 1) engineer not always keeping vocals at exactly the right level (with respect to levels for rest of the band parts), and 2) maybe add 1 more measure before the chorus and before the bridge, then really work on building energy into both of those sections.
I DO think this one is first-rate, and probably ready to be shopped around (the small negatives I mentioned are not really major problems at all).
Best wishes in all your songwriting/musical endeavors!!!
November 01, 2018
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Joseph Guerra
Kool song Gizzly, good guitar work as well
September 27, 2018
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