It is the story of first love from Heaven to Hell
Hi Ani,
feels like a honest song about ‘first love’. I would suggest to avoid this big gap between verse and chorus It’s a better flow if you go directly into the chorus.
May 22, 2018
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Here's the story of the first time I loved
Hit me like a ton
I had not felt this way at all
At the blues bar, we were dancing and smiling
Were the only ones in the whole word seemingly
Chorus
Don't know why love came by so strong
Don't know why love can die, it's so wrong
Disappointment and Betrayal
The Great Divide
Cried more than I thought, couldn't eat much
Love died inside
I recovered, and I married someone else
But I won't forget first love's journey
Heaven to Hell
Chorus
Don't know why love had found me and then just left
Don't know why our love story had to pass
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Hi Ani,
You have a really sweet, infectious voice. The only suggestion I might add is that it sounds like many verses. In other words, you might add more separation between your verse and chorus.
May 19, 2018
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Hi Ani,
feels like a honest song about ‘first love’. I would suggest to avoid this big gap between verse and chorus It’s a better flow if you go directly into the chorus.
May 22, 2018
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Jack Speer
Hi Ani,
You have a really sweet, infectious voice. The only suggestion I might add is that it sounds like many verses. In other words, you might add more separation between your verse and chorus.
May 19, 2018
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