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a song of heartache and nostalgia.
Any Feedback is welcome!
nice guitar and production and melody. Lyrics were hard for me to pick out in the verses unfortunately. But, of what I could pick out, I thought you did a great job supporting the hook/title. Good luck!
April 22, 2018
Wow, I really liked the song. But I wished that the bridge/the chorus would’ve stood out a little bit more so there would’ve been contrast more between the sections. Take a listen to some of the hits and you might get my point. But great song anyway, and I really did enjoy listening to it. 
) Keep going!
April 22, 2018
Evan - I do think you have got a glinting diamond of a contemporary song here 
It’s got great acoustic guitar hook ( almost a pop/Indie feel to that) , it’s sung with real feeling and energy ...and I liked the main lyrical hook.
Loads of potential . A studio recording would surely add the clarity and impact for your vocals the song deserves ! Room for more light in shade in the production for sure. I would experiment with harmonies to add impact to the chorus , particularly the “I wish we could ” line. Good luck with it.
April 27, 2018
Hi Evan, you are really a talented singer/songwriter. I like the song, it has a cool start with the guitar sequence and also lyrically, however the separation between the sections is a bit too weak. You have to change something in the chorus to make the chorus more outstanding, same with the bridge. The way it is know, it is too much repetition and get’s a bit boring in the end. Keep on - good Luck!
April 29, 2018
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Verse:
we could drive through this no where town like we did every Sunday
or talk through the night in that empty lot by the tracks
take just one step back towards being young
you know I wish We Could
if who we were wasn’t all in the past
and we lived in a perfect world
Chorus:
I wish you could be in my arms
where I needed you for so long
I wish I could just hear your name
and not hit the floor where I stood
I Wish We Could
Verse:
Every time I see those city lights
I want you more
If we could go to that August night
When you told me those three words
spend the night on my black leather seats in the back
you know I wish we Could
If you had asked me to do anything that night
I believe I would
Bridge:
i’ve been lost and lonely
you were the only girl
who could ever hold me
along with this whole world
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nice guitar and production and melody. Lyrics were hard for me to pick out in the verses unfortunately. But, of what I could pick out, I thought you did a great job supporting the hook/title. Good luck!
April 22, 2018
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Wow, I really liked the song. But I wished that the bridge/the chorus would’ve stood out a little bit more so there would’ve been contrast more between the sections. Take a listen to some of the hits and you might get my point. But great song anyway, and I really did enjoy listening to it. ) Keep going!
April 22, 2018
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Evan - I do think you have got a glinting diamond of a contemporary song here It’s got great acoustic guitar hook ( almost a pop/Indie feel to that) , it’s sung with real feeling and energy ...and I liked the main lyrical hook.
Loads of potential . A studio recording would surely add the clarity and impact for your vocals the song deserves ! Room for more light in shade in the production for sure. I would experiment with harmonies to add impact to the chorus , particularly the “I wish we could ” line. Good luck with it.
April 27, 2018
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Hi Evan, you are really a talented singer/songwriter. I like the song, it has a cool start with the guitar sequence and also lyrically, however the separation between the sections is a bit too weak. You have to change something in the chorus to make the chorus more outstanding, same with the bridge. The way it is know, it is too much repetition and get’s a bit boring in the end. Keep on - good Luck!
April 29, 2018
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Randy England
Hey cool voice and cool song.
April 21, 2018