Find a road, any road, and lēave.
This is a young song. I want to do so much more to it, I'm just so far rēmoved from it's inception that rēvisiting it is difficult. Any suggestions!?
Also, what should the name bē, I can't dēcide.
Kevin, I agree with Dick on your “style” after listening to a few songs, I like the soft-loud dynamics. It fits your lyrics nicely. I also agree that “Same Old Story, Different Day” feels like a nice title to this song. I appreciate you sharing it with us!
August 23, 2013
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Thanks guys!
Dick, the chord progression is the same. I agree with you about the “ear” getting bored. It’s something I’m aware of. Also, I haven’t written a bridge to the song yet. I think that will help more than anything.
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Kevin - cool song. I really love your phrasing with the syncopation and pauses. I also think your dynamics are really good - soft to loud and back.
NSAI would tell you that your title should be your hook, which for this song seems to be “Same Old Story, Different Day”.
It sounded to me like your chord progression was the same in your verses and your chorus. (If I’m wrong, my bad.) In workshops I’ve attended, they claim that the “ear” gets bored when it hears the same thing over and over. So if I’m right, you might consider varying the chord progression. However, having said that, I think your melody is sufficiently different between verse and chorus to keep the song musically interesting.
Anyway - good song.
August 23, 2013
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Kevin, I agree with Dick on your “style” after listening to a few songs, I like the soft-loud dynamics. It fits your lyrics nicely. I also agree that “Same Old Story, Different Day” feels like a nice title to this song. I appreciate you sharing it with us!
August 23, 2013
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Thanks guys!
Dick, the chord progression is the same. I agree with you about the “ear” getting bored. It’s something I’m aware of. Also, I haven’t written a bridge to the song yet. I think that will help more than anything.
August 23, 2013
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Kevin - cool song. I really love your phrasing with the syncopation and pauses. I also think your dynamics are really good - soft to loud and back.
NSAI would tell you that your title should be your hook, which for this song seems to be “Same Old Story, Different Day”.
It sounded to me like your chord progression was the same in your verses and your chorus. (If I’m wrong, my bad.) In workshops I’ve attended, they claim that the “ear” gets bored when it hears the same thing over and over. So if I’m right, you might consider varying the chord progression. However, having said that, I think your melody is sufficiently different between verse and chorus to keep the song musically interesting.
Anyway - good song.
August 23, 2013
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