It took many years for me to write this song. I wrote it for my mom. It's about the hurt and pain she endured for many years with my father. My brother and I saw it all.
Wonderful melody…
I found some of the lyrics a little awkward and the rhyme for the verses not as strong as I think it could have been. Also it seems that you changed the rhyme scheme in the last two verses.
I feel the chorus is pretty good the way it is…nice sentiment of Angels on Mama’s side tonight.
I think you have a good concept of how to tell the story and you use imagery well. However I find that some parts of the song could use more information.
An example is your first verse-
She went to church on Sunday morning - ok
And prayed that no one would know - Ok
How she spent her Saturday nights - Ok
Driving up and down the backroads - Unclear.
I’m confused cause why would the people at church care if she was driving up and down the back-roads…so obviously there is some alternate or hidden meaning to this line…which in my mind is not clear. My 2 cents…Great song.
February 02, 2018
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She went to church on Sunday morning
And prayed that no one would know
How she spent her Saturday nights
Driving up and down the backroads
He would be sitting at a bar
Or in a hotel room
And he knew that she would find him
In the arms of someone new
There has to be angels on momma's side tonight
Heaven only knows why hate don't fill her eyes
The pain runs so deep
No one knows or can see what hides beneath
Oh there has to be angels on momma's side tonight
She tried to keep it a secret
From all of her family and friends
But in the middle of the night
You can still hear her crying
CHORUS
Another black eye
Something more for her to hide
Little eyes see the sins of the night
We'll never know the man he could have been
The bottle owned his soul
Sin of night can't take hold again
He won't hurt her anymore
CHORUS
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sounds really nice . When you get time can you post the lyrics so I can take a look thx. Keep up good work very touching
January 29, 2018
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Wonderful melody…
I found some of the lyrics a little awkward and the rhyme for the verses not as strong as I think it could have been. Also it seems that you changed the rhyme scheme in the last two verses.
I feel the chorus is pretty good the way it is…nice sentiment of Angels on Mama’s side tonight.
I think you have a good concept of how to tell the story and you use imagery well. However I find that some parts of the song could use more information.
An example is your first verse-
She went to church on Sunday morning - ok
And prayed that no one would know - Ok
How she spent her Saturday nights - Ok
Driving up and down the backroads - Unclear.
I’m confused cause why would the people at church care if she was driving up and down the back-roads…so obviously there is some alternate or hidden meaning to this line…which in my mind is not clear. My 2 cents…Great song.
February 02, 2018
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Kevin Fox
sounds really nice . When you get time can you post the lyrics so I can take a look thx. Keep up good work very touching
January 29, 2018
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