Just a fun kinda bluesy picture of the love that my wife and I have... I recorded and mixed this at home ...
Feel free to comment ... the lyric is "under construction" after all I'm not a songwriter I'm a song re-writer!!
This is a sweet song - my only thoughts are that the twangy lead guitar is distracting from your vocal at times so could maybe come down in the mix or the part could be pruned. I could hear some soulful female backing vocals added maybe too?
October 20, 2017
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I'll bring the matches you bring the fireworks
I can't wait to spark your fuse
Together we'll light the midnite sky
Honey we just can't lose ...
This kind of love makes m' heart beat faster
This kind of love makes it hard to breathe
This kind of love 'l bring a strong man to his knees
Everybody wants this kind of love
You're like fine wine, I'm more like whiskey
Ooo, it's somethin' when we mix it up
Just the thought makes me smile all over
A total body blush...
(chorus)
Standin' on the edge of our forever
I'm thinkin' forever might not be enough
(chorus)
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Hey, Gregg! Thanks for sharing your song with us! I like that it’s a positive love song with some groove.
Now, with this title and basic idea is setting yourself up for a big challenge. The idea and title have both been done before, so you REALLY have to bring something powerful and different to it to make it stand out. And while it’s lyrically solid (makes sense, stays on theme, nice bookend of the hook in the chorus, etc.), I’m not hearing something that really makes my ears perk up.
So there’s solid writing here, but it didn’t hit that next level (for me, anyway) that would knock my socks off.
Hope that helps. Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
October 17, 2017
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This is a sweet song - my only thoughts are that the twangy lead guitar is distracting from your vocal at times so could maybe come down in the mix or the part could be pruned. I could hear some soulful female backing vocals added maybe too?
October 20, 2017
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Hey, Gregg! Thanks for sharing your song with us! I like that it’s a positive love song with some groove.
Now, with this title and basic idea is setting yourself up for a big challenge. The idea and title have both been done before, so you REALLY have to bring something powerful and different to it to make it stand out. And while it’s lyrically solid (makes sense, stays on theme, nice bookend of the hook in the chorus, etc.), I’m not hearing something that really makes my ears perk up.
So there’s solid writing here, but it didn’t hit that next level (for me, anyway) that would knock my socks off.
Hope that helps. Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
October 17, 2017
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