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a girl working for a grammy, but know's that may never happen and whether it happens or not, happy with the legacy she is making.
Any and all feedback is very much appreciated!:)
Phillip,
I agree, I could work on specifying the legacy, that the artist would like to leave. Thank You!
August 28, 2017
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another day
it's a new sunrise
brush off my boots
I'm here to get it right
people say its wishful thinking
I need to stop
cause your stuck dreaming
Pre-chorus
oh, waoh, oh
watch me
they can watch me
oh, waoh, oh
long live my legacy
chorus
oh, oooh
it's a needle in the haystack
a shot in the dark, I know
oh, I know oh
ooh
legacy is more than
winning a grammy
or the gold
loving who I am
working hard
and being bold
listening ear
to someone hurting
trying to care
is more than ordinary
they can say I just a girl
I need to stop
I'll never change the world
Repeat Pre-chorus
chorus
Bridge
living it up
with the simple things
put a smile someones face
making memories
a shoulder to cry on
someones warm embrace
forgiving myself for my mistakes
Repeat chorus
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Nice idea and concept, but think you could go a little deeper on the legacy you want to leave.
Lyric wise, I think I’d switch around the pre-chorus and first part of the chorus. I think it flows better that way.
Keep writing!
Phillip
August 27, 2017
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Phillip,
I agree, I could work on specifying the legacy, that the artist would like to leave. Thank You!
August 28, 2017
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Phillip Lemmonds
Nice idea and concept, but think you could go a little deeper on the legacy you want to leave.
Lyric wise, I think I’d switch around the pre-chorus and first part of the chorus. I think it flows better that way.
Keep writing!
Phillip
August 27, 2017