Having a guy friend who is in a relationship with another girl and the story is that she just wants him to be happy, but wishes that she was the one dating him.
As always, any and all feedback is appreciated! Thanks in advance for your time!
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VERSE
You say you found a girl to give your whole world to
I say I'm happy for you, and that's the truth
But buried deep down inside, secretly
I wish it was me
CHORUS
I wish it was me
Who you're thinkin' 'bout late at night when you can't sleep
I wish it was me
Who you turn to in your moments of need
I wish it was me
The one you're holdin' tight
Kissin' goodnight
And sharin' all your dreams
Oh I wish, I wish, I wish
I wish it was me
VERSE
You tell me 'bout your future plans that you're making with her
You ask me for advice, so I put you first
I'm putting on a happy face, but really it's killing me
'Cause I wish it was me
CHORUS
BRIDGE
I wish you knew the way I feel about you
But I don't wanna cause this friendship to break
So I can never bring myself to tell you the truth
And say
CHORUS
OUTRO
I wish it was me
Oh, Oh
Ooo
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I like it. I have been wanting to write a song kind of like this (only from a guy’s perspective) but you beat me to it!
Overall I would say it is good. The line “Sharin’ all your dreams” doesn’t really make grammatical sense. Maybe you could say something like “Seein’ in your dreams” instead.
Hope that helps. Great job!
August 17, 2017
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Graham Donahue
I like it. I have been wanting to write a song kind of like this (only from a guy’s perspective) but you beat me to it!
Overall I would say it is good. The line “Sharin’ all your dreams” doesn’t really make grammatical sense. Maybe you could say something like “Seein’ in your dreams” instead.
Hope that helps. Great job!
August 17, 2017
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