A man totally blind to why his girl left him, but is still devastated in his ignorance and lost love. He feels scorned in his community, but this pain is nothing in comparison to his loss. I wrote, produced and performed the song using my home studio. (Robert Lloyd)
Does the song or lyrics mean anything to the listener, is the melody memorable, and is the recording acceptable? But most importantly, simply, did you like the song or not?
Hi Graham and I am honored that you took the time to give me some feedback. And you are right, the English grammar is atrocious. But I actually meant it to be like that to show a very basic feel to the song. And each line should stand by itself rather than read like a book, so I am guilty with some qualification. And the word ‘gone’ versus ‘went’ was determined by the singability (word made up) of the words as ‘gone’ is much preferable to sing and more soulful.
And my mother and older sisters would have scolded me at the dinner table with these lyrics! LOL My dad would have just smiled. <g>
Thanks again and I cherish the comments.
May 29, 2017
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'SHE UP AND LEFT ME STANDING'
Written by Robert Lloyd (Copyright: April-3-2016)
(Verse 1)
C E
A year ago she left me, time goes slowly by...
Am F G
She broke my heart and gone away, Lord, she never said goodbye.
Am F
And with my life now shattered, and I keep to myself...
C G C
I don't know why, or how I survive..
(Verse 2)
With heavy heart I'm waiting... trapped inside my dreams.
And people talk behind my back... not trying to be mean.
I keep moving on and on, and keeping to myself...
I don't know why, or how I survive.
(Chorus)
F E
She up and left me standing, 'bout a year ago...
Am F G
She left me standing by myself, for reasons I don't know.
F Am
She up and left me standing, and heaven's I don't know...
F G C
God please help me, I think it's my time to go...
(Verse 3)
The world seems cold and empty, no matter what I do...
My love for her was all I had... when she left me all to You...
Tell me Lord, what I'm to do, that will get me through...
I don't know why, or how I survive.
(Repeat chorus and out)
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The song seems pretty good overall. I would say the wording is a little off on the first verse.
It seems that it should read, “She broke my heart and WENT away,” instead on “GONE away.” Also the last line “And with my life now shattered, and I keep to myself…” isn’t worded properly. It should say, “...with my life now shattered, I keep to myself,” or better yet “I’m keeping to myself.” Something along those lines.
May 28, 2017
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Hi Graham and I am honored that you took the time to give me some feedback. And you are right, the English grammar is atrocious. But I actually meant it to be like that to show a very basic feel to the song. And each line should stand by itself rather than read like a book, so I am guilty with some qualification. And the word ‘gone’ versus ‘went’ was determined by the singability (word made up) of the words as ‘gone’ is much preferable to sing and more soulful.
And my mother and older sisters would have scolded me at the dinner table with these lyrics! LOL My dad would have just smiled. <g>
Thanks again and I cherish the comments.
May 29, 2017
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Graham Donahue
The song seems pretty good overall. I would say the wording is a little off on the first verse.
It seems that it should read, “She broke my heart and WENT away,” instead on “GONE away.” Also the last line “And with my life now shattered, and I keep to myself…” isn’t worded properly. It should say, “...with my life now shattered, I keep to myself,” or better yet “I’m keeping to myself.” Something along those lines.
May 28, 2017