Moments that motivate you to "talk" to God
Any feedback is appreciated.
Thanks Brent…very good idea to pull back into one story vs two…thanks for the suggestion, I’ll definitely look at using that!
April 01, 2017
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Dave,
Great beat, you sure know how to write, this is very well-written, but more importantly it’s enjoyable to listen to.
May 17, 2017
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Church Parking Lot
Dave Quirk and David Hill
Verse1
Never felt closer to God than being parked outside
In dad’s old silver buick with red leather seats
David Lee Roth singing ‘Jamie’s Crying’
Six pack from a Quick Sack, bought with a fake ID
Pre Chorus
Under the first baptist steeple
Blue lights flash in the rearview
Shoving empties under the seats
Praying “Lord what do I do?”
Chorus
Never had a clue
We’d get caught
It was a moment in time
I haven’t forgot
Begging for mercy
Right there on the spot
Talking to God
In a church parking lot
Verse 2
A promise to the man upstairs is one you shouldn’t break
But when the preacher’s daughter grabs your hand, you can’t say no
While her daddy was saving souls inside, we slipped away
Burned down Eden in the church van nice and slow
Pre Chorus 2
When the bells rang out at noon
People flooded outside
It was a moment of reckoning
With nowhere to hide
(Repeat Chorus x2)
Tag
Yeah, some things
Can’t be forgot
Like talking to God
In a church parking lot
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Hey, Dave! Thanks for sharing this song. I dig. Lot of it. I like the fresh twist you brought to the well-worn “making out in the church parking lot” trope.
Just a thought… What if you worked all this into one continuous story instead of a couple little stories? For example, verse 1 has him and the preacher’s daughter in his car one night, and he’s praying for a kiss. Verse 2 has them making out (same night), then you could maybe go pull an “Unanswered Prayers” and go straight from V2 into a bridge where they finally come up for air and realize that a Tuesday night deacons meeting has apparently just let out and they’re all staring slack-jawed at the singer’s car. Now he’s praying for deliverance.
I think you can pull more emotion and humor out if you dig more deeply into one story instead of two. For an example, see what we did with the Joe Nichols cut. “Crickets.” It’s under my profile.
Hope that helps! If so, pay it forward by reviewing someone else’s song!
March 30, 2017
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Thanks Brent…very good idea to pull back into one story vs two…thanks for the suggestion, I’ll definitely look at using that!
April 01, 2017
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Dave,
Great beat, you sure know how to write, this is very well-written, but more importantly it’s enjoyable to listen to.
May 17, 2017
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Hey, Dave! Thanks for sharing this song. I dig. Lot of it. I like the fresh twist you brought to the well-worn “making out in the church parking lot” trope.
Just a thought… What if you worked all this into one continuous story instead of a couple little stories? For example, verse 1 has him and the preacher’s daughter in his car one night, and he’s praying for a kiss. Verse 2 has them making out (same night), then you could maybe go pull an “Unanswered Prayers” and go straight from V2 into a bridge where they finally come up for air and realize that a Tuesday night deacons meeting has apparently just let out and they’re all staring slack-jawed at the singer’s car. Now he’s praying for deliverance.
I think you can pull more emotion and humor out if you dig more deeply into one story instead of two. For an example, see what we did with the Joe Nichols cut. “Crickets.” It’s under my profile.
Hope that helps! If so, pay it forward by reviewing someone else’s song!
March 30, 2017
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