Fly Off The Earth
c.Glen King
1.
Put all of my heart into writing this song
So, I hope you will hear it right now
I wrote the words on a napkin I found
And, the music just poured out, somehow
So listen to these lines that I'm singing
There's a piece of myself in each note
You're the sunshine that brightens each day of my life
And, the zephyr that keeps it afloat:
Ch.
We will Fly Off The Earth on these wings that we share
We will soar like an eagle on the uplifting air
And, when we are touching the edges of space
We will Fly Off The Earth, to a heaven, somewhere.
2.
Spent all of my nights just counting the stars
While I waited for a lover to come
But fate never showered her favors on me
Or gave me a reason to look for the sun
All I could see were the shadows creeping
So, I lived in a nightmare awhile
Then, you gave me my life and my freedom back
And, filled me with the dreams of a child:
Ch.
We will Fly Off The Earth on these wings that we share
We will soar like an eagle on the uplifting air
And, when we are touching the edges of space
We will Fly Off The Earth, to a heaven, somewhere.
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Hey, Glen! Thanks for sharing. I dig the title. It’s really intriguing and makes me want to listen to the song. I call it “winning before you’re spinning.”
I feel the first verse is too much about the singer, for a couple of reasons. If you write this for a artist to record, they might want to take a good chunk of the song to talk about how they wrote this song if they didn’t actually write it. If it’s for you or your cowriter to sing, it feels like it’s not enough about the lover. After all, if this person and you are really in this good of a relationship, why do they need all that convincing to listen to your song. Try to find a way to SHOW how in love or happy you are than just talking about it, if that makes sense. The whole meta “here’s how I wrote this song” also won’t really relate to the listener (on either side of this love story). “What’s in it for the listener.”
I like the feel. It’s well recorded and performed. I like that it’s a positive love song in direct address. And, again, the title is cool. Thanks again for sharing!
February 02, 2017
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Hey, Glen! Thanks for sharing. I dig the title. It’s really intriguing and makes me want to listen to the song. I call it “winning before you’re spinning.”
I feel the first verse is too much about the singer, for a couple of reasons. If you write this for a artist to record, they might want to take a good chunk of the song to talk about how they wrote this song if they didn’t actually write it. If it’s for you or your cowriter to sing, it feels like it’s not enough about the lover. After all, if this person and you are really in this good of a relationship, why do they need all that convincing to listen to your song. Try to find a way to SHOW how in love or happy you are than just talking about it, if that makes sense. The whole meta “here’s how I wrote this song” also won’t really relate to the listener (on either side of this love story). “What’s in it for the listener.”
I like the feel. It’s well recorded and performed. I like that it’s a positive love song in direct address. And, again, the title is cool. Thanks again for sharing!
February 02, 2017
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