Entombing old heartache.
Ideas for which direction I should take it on a production level! (: Instrumentation, voicings? Acoustic or synth? I'm all ears!
This is very pretty song!
I would keep it acoustic. I also like the idea of adding strings. I think the song has an unusual structure that lends to the uniqueness of it.
July 13, 2016
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Graze your palm on everything that's cold
Make its strength your strength
Moss and frigid stone
Lost, you call it home
Blue, blue, blue
Blue, blue, blue
But fear the fire, fear the heat
Rather shiver in your sheets
Blue, blue, blue
Blue, blue, blue
I'm always gonna want you
Leave Ohio
Faces bleached with snow
This breath you caught yourself
The only way you know
Lips are blue, blue, blue
Blue, blue, blue
Feel the fire, feel the heat
Swear you'll keep your conscience clean
Burning whiter, safe to sleep
You will say it's always been me
Blue, blue, blue
Blue, blue, blue
I'm always gonna want you
Blue, blue, blue
Blue, blue, blue
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Firstly, beautiful song!
Production notes (obviously I’m still trying to figure that side of things out as well - so just opinions):
Based on the mood and the simple nature of the song, I would keep the production light and stay acoustic. Maybe some subtle strings and the song progresses. The background vocals are very cool - I would maybe build them a little more as well. Maybe additional harmonies on the chorus? (and more up front with the lead vocal I think).
On this recording - am I hearing a moving pan on the guitar or is it two guitars with rapid level changes? Whichever it is, at first I thought it was very cool but as the song progressed I found it kind of distracting and it kept taking me away from the vocal. I would not have it move so much and maybe only in the breaks where there is no vocal. I almost think the stereo image was a little overdone for my taste (but just by a bit).
Overall, beautiful song!
April 21, 2016
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Sean Kasey
Firstly, beautiful song!
Production notes (obviously I’m still trying to figure that side of things out as well - so just opinions):
Based on the mood and the simple nature of the song, I would keep the production light and stay acoustic. Maybe some subtle strings and the song progresses. The background vocals are very cool - I would maybe build them a little more as well. Maybe additional harmonies on the chorus? (and more up front with the lead vocal I think).
On this recording - am I hearing a moving pan on the guitar or is it two guitars with rapid level changes? Whichever it is, at first I thought it was very cool but as the song progressed I found it kind of distracting and it kept taking me away from the vocal. I would not have it move so much and maybe only in the breaks where there is no vocal. I almost think the stereo image was a little overdone for my taste (but just by a bit).
Overall, beautiful song!
April 21, 2016
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