A song about the beauty of unfinished business. (full story here: http://on.fb.me/1OwqbIW)
Production-specific critique welcome!
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This is such a beautiful song. Beautifully crafted and sung. I love the step up at the end on the chorus the second time round. And the oohs and the voice effects in the beginning and the ending. It kinda gives you this feeling like your a balloon or leaf floating around in the breeze and at the end you float away to the sky feeling light as a feather. Don’t know if that’s what you were going for but it’s beautiful. I had to listen to it 3 times because I kept feeling like something was missing. It has a very tremble sound to it all the way through and (just a suggestion) I thought it might ground it some if a bit of base tone could be added but just to compliment at the same melodic beauty that it holds like a low cello tone or I think would sound awesome would be some male vocals to harmonize. Really enjoyed this.
January 10, 2016
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Count the shooting stars around your silhouette
Subtract the times my heart skipped a beat
The sum of all these parts is here and now
Here, we've found
The key into the galaxy, and we won't come down
Is it alright if I kiss you now?
Take my tired hands
Pull me into you
Let's tangle up till the stars fall down
We'll count them one by one
Here and now
Here, we've found
The key into the galaxy, and we won't come down
Is it alright if I kiss you now?
Count the shooting stars that fall to crown your head
The night's conspired to find us here
The sum of all these parts is
Here and now
Here, we've found
The key into the galaxy, and we won't come down
Is it alright if I kiss you?
Is it alright if I kiss you?
Is it alright if I kiss you now?
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I enjoy your music very much and this was really awesome especially after reading the full story. Def. makes me curious on what he’s doing now and if he’s okay. Also, eager to get a copy of this. Have you thought about making it for sale for us to snag?
January 06, 2016
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This is such a beautiful song. Beautifully crafted and sung. I love the step up at the end on the chorus the second time round. And the oohs and the voice effects in the beginning and the ending. It kinda gives you this feeling like your a balloon or leaf floating around in the breeze and at the end you float away to the sky feeling light as a feather. Don’t know if that’s what you were going for but it’s beautiful. I had to listen to it 3 times because I kept feeling like something was missing. It has a very tremble sound to it all the way through and (just a suggestion) I thought it might ground it some if a bit of base tone could be added but just to compliment at the same melodic beauty that it holds like a low cello tone or I think would sound awesome would be some male vocals to harmonize. Really enjoyed this.
January 10, 2016
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Dennis Field
I enjoy your music very much and this was really awesome especially after reading the full story. Def. makes me curious on what he’s doing now and if he’s okay. Also, eager to get a copy of this. Have you thought about making it for sale for us to snag?
January 06, 2016
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