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Landon, Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed this very much. The piano is really nice and the whole song has some nice emotion to it. I’d def. purchase this if you ever decide to make it available on the site. Catchy.
January 21, 2016
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VERSE I:
The rays of autumn, they turn to blue
Whenever I think of you
And the moon seeks the sun while my hearts comes alive
It beats fast as I long for you
And though I may get too tongue-tied
Your soul's to rare to come by
With you I long for just one more night
CHORUS:
Let's take a ride on my bicycle
I promise to keep you warm
I'll give you a ride on my bicycle
Please don't let me go, just hold on
I've got the pedal, you grip the breaks
We'll take it slow, there's no one to race
Let's take a ride on my bicycle
VERSE II:
I stare at your window frozen in time
Wishing I could be there with you
Cause each time we kissed I'd see the stars align
Am I what's best for you?
Call me crazy, that's alright
But to me you mean more than any word could describe
So let's hit the road, no street lights
CHORUS
BRIDGE (REVISION):
Ooo, I'd tattoo you onto my skin
Just so you could stick with me till the end
CHORUS II:
Let's take a ride on my bicycle
Cause I'm tired of riding these streets alone
I'll give you a ride on my bicycle
Then I promise I'll take you back home
I've got the pedal, you grip the breaks
We'll take it slow, there's no one
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Nice tune. I like the simple, clear arrangement and your clear and emotional vocals. The song has intensity and a strong emotional core.
One thing that might make the tune stronger is making the chorus and bridge pop a bit more. As produced, those parts sound too similar to the verses, to my ears. You might consider adding more instrumentation to the chorus and bridge (electric guitar, bass, drums?) to give them more presence.
So overall I like the song but think it needs better dynamics.
October 09, 2015
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Landon, Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed this very much. The piano is really nice and the whole song has some nice emotion to it. I’d def. purchase this if you ever decide to make it available on the site. Catchy.
January 21, 2016
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Jeremy Shere
Nice tune. I like the simple, clear arrangement and your clear and emotional vocals. The song has intensity and a strong emotional core.
One thing that might make the tune stronger is making the chorus and bridge pop a bit more. As produced, those parts sound too similar to the verses, to my ears. You might consider adding more instrumentation to the chorus and bridge (electric guitar, bass, drums?) to give them more presence.
So overall I like the song but think it needs better dynamics.
October 09, 2015