Heartbreak in Relationship
I would love to hear your thoughts! Does the song change your mood? Do the lyrics speak to you? Does it stick in your head? Is there a phrase that doesn't make sense or seems out of place?
thank you!!
Dennis,
Thanks for the feedback and Frettie welcome! I look forward to listening to new music and learning as much as I can!
April 07, 2015
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VERSE 1:
This Old House
Ain't the Same When Your Gone
Every Light Is On
Listening To Our Song
Wonderin' What Went Wrong
What Went Wrong
When Are You Coming Home
VERSE 2:
I've Fixed The Table
Replaced The Lights
Changed The Furniture A Thousand Times
Yet It still Ain't Right
It Still Ain't Right
Your Not Here Tonight
It Still Ain't Right
CHORUS:
If You Only Knew
How Many Times I Cried
Held My Pillow Tight
To Hide The Screams
Locked Inside
And These Walls And I
Can't Decide
Should I Fight To Stay
One More Time
Or Should I Leave
Tonight
Cause These Lonely Days And Sacred Nights
Never Cross Your Mind
I Can't Breathe
Can't Catch My Breath
I Can't Think
Can't Get You Outta My Head
The Words You Said
Now There's Nothing Left
But Tears Tattooed On My Chest
Yeah There's Nothing Left
VERSE 4:
I Watch You Smile
Turn On Them Eyes
Spin Around And Then I Realize
Love Is Blind
So Was I
I Still Want To Call You Mine
Man Love Is Blind
Bridge Idea:
Why Did You
Let Go
Turn Cold
Burn Me Down
Leave Me Hanging
All Alone
There Was No Intro
No Signs
To Say
You moved on
While You Were Out
Burning It Down
Messing Around
With All My Heart
My Mind and My Soul
But What They Don’t Know
True Love They'll Never Find
It Won’t Ever Cross Your Mind
No It Won’t Ever Cross Your Mind
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I liked this. I had a tough time with how it gets going. It just didn’t hit me while I was following the lyrics. The chorus I like, the energy in the song is nice, but I was not completely moved. I’d say keep going with it for sure, I just had a tough time following the story.
April 06, 2015
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Dennis,
Thanks for the feedback and Frettie welcome! I look forward to listening to new music and learning as much as I can!
April 07, 2015
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Dennis Field
I liked this. I had a tough time with how it gets going. It just didn’t hit me while I was following the lyrics. The chorus I like, the energy in the song is nice, but I was not completely moved. I’d say keep going with it for sure, I just had a tough time following the story.
April 06, 2015
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