Sometimes the life of a musician can be sad and lonely and the only way to express it is through song.
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The Only Thing
Sometimes it feels like my heart doesn’t beat anymore
Sometimes it feels like nothing falls but rain
Sometimes I don’t know why I can’t walk out the door
Sometimes I’m too numb to feel the pain
Walking down exchange, soaked to the bone from the rain
Holding fast to the cash from my last show
Knowing I would not be here now if I could hold you again
Wondering if its finally too late to go back home
I’d say we’re only human
I’d say everything is worth a try
But you would know that I was lying
Cause the only thing I never could say is goodbye
When you see the world through the streetlights it changes how it looks
Shadows trick the mind and fool the soul
There’s a lonely secret you’ll never learn from books
It’s the loneliness that comes when you finally lose control
Chorus
Sometimes I feel like a man who used to be
Sometimes I can’t remember when
Sometimes yesterday eats up the insides of me
Sometimes I’m just looking for a friend
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Joshua - beautiful song. I think you painted some very neat images. I also liked the energy (dynamics) of your bridge.
The only thing I would change is the melody on the first line of your chorus. The melodic range of your chorus and your verses is mostly the same. That’s alright, but I think your chorus could be more distinctive if the melody of the first line came in higher than the last line of your verse. (Maybe similar to the first line of your bridge.)
Regardless - really nice song
August 14, 2014
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Dick Plunk
Joshua - beautiful song. I think you painted some very neat images. I also liked the energy (dynamics) of your bridge.
The only thing I would change is the melody on the first line of your chorus. The melodic range of your chorus and your verses is mostly the same. That’s alright, but I think your chorus could be more distinctive if the melody of the first line came in higher than the last line of your verse. (Maybe similar to the first line of your bridge.)
Regardless - really nice song
August 14, 2014
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